SEA STORIES

three Haiku strung together

A touch of sea foam

as it bubbles up the beach

covers my cold feet

A smokey gray sky

assists the calm of the sea

no ripples today

I smell salty air

the sea is so curative

I can float all day

Author's Note

three separate Haiku stanzas

Reviews

[Lea Sheryn]

I wish I could float all day.

[emmajoy]

Beautiful words and clear as clear in their 5:7:5 form. You always hit the nail on the button!

Will help me into my dreams the morrow, inhaling the air, feeling the spray, toes tingling. Thank you so much, Betty.

[Chris Shaw]

Your haikus Betty give wonderful imagery of the sea. I find a visit so uplifting and nothing better than a paddle in salty water. Certainly has healing powers. Beautifully penned.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Chris for your lovely comment as always
Best, Betty

[Ladysue]

Hi Betty, I love the sea. It’s my sanctuary. You captured the feeling the sea brings. Playfulness, calm and healing. A pleasure to read.. Fondly Sue

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Sue for reading my poem, best, Betty

[Lale]

Alas! I'm craving this mood.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Lale; I appreciate your review

[Levi Levin]

Sounds very relaxing. Great work!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your kind words!

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome!

[Betty Hermelee]

Please try to critically review my poems, thank you!

[Samuel Dickens]

Being a twenty year Navy veteran, I had to read this. I know little about poetry, but see here three different salty scenes, all familiar to me. Although I spent much more time far from land than I did walking the beach, these visions are the same. I've seen angry seas with giant swells and waves, but also calm seas void of ripples--glass as far as the eye could see. Landlocked now, I sometimes crave to smell that air and hear the seagulls cry.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Samuel , appreciate your visit

[Patricia Wedel]

Seas soft feather down
wearing a seaweed pearl Crown
healing broken hearts

p.s. I join your Haiku healing song...
gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Pat for your lovely words! Stay safe

[barleygirl]

I always prefer my haiku in clusters becuz one is never enuf. These 3 stand nicely on their own, plus contributing to a fulsome scene that you paint in imagery. On the one hand, I love how you use an interactive approach, expressing imagery in terms of your own actions, showing the sensations as being your own dynamic experience in nature. But on the other hand, I think of Haiku as being about nature, so I'm not sure I fully endorse the way you inject yourself into the scene -- Haiku is usually stated in bare-bones imagery. I tend to end up in favor of your self-inclusion becuz (1) screw the poetry police and (2) your self-inclusion is well-done (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Betty Hermelee]

Screw the rues of Haiku!! Thanks for giving me the extra credit!! xo, B

[bee]

I love the seaside and this just transports me right to that lovely feeling you get standing near the ocean

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you kindly for your review