BLIND LOVE

Haiku, love

In darkness we nest

my hands reach to sense her mouth

she stirs to feel mine

Our fingers entwine

as we play with our faces

our lips smack as one

Juicy smooches stick

we whiff each other's warm breath

laugh at our weird jokes

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

What a delightful little poem this is. Sensual and filled with anticipation. Reminds me dear Betty of many, many moons ago. I admire what you have portrayed here and done so well. Now that has put some warmth into the cold air. Great senryus.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Chris for your lovely comment!!!!
fondly, Betty

[bigfootprint]

A foray into innocence, always pleasant, Betty. A smile-worthy summer rerun for everyone. Blind love is one of the few places in life where even almost is delightful. You regale with moments of love, rendered in purity, simplicity, and naivete that scream eloquence and profundity. Another well done. -- Doug

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow Doug! What a great review !thank you from the bottom of my hear,always,Betty

[bigfootprint]

A fun read

[Richard🖌]

Mm, Betty ⚤

First, you create the scene; then, you pull us in with you, into your irresistible imagery, making it as though we are experiencing all with its sensually warm, sweet delight into the night.
There is no doubt you understand that love needs no sight, because in all its glory it's essence lies in what is felt and shared between two playfully, immersed and inspired souls.

For all the difference it makes in the sensation and enthrallment of tender moments, your verses are actually Senryu (human), rather than Haiku (nature) … but, who's complaining, eh? ; )

Eloquently laid, Dear Poetess, with such a romantic picture to set the perfect scene … I love it! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Betty Hermelee]

Richard: as always your comments are analytical and so in tune with my thoughts! Thanks so much!

[Richard🖌]

You're welcome, Betty,
You make poetry a delightful joy. : )

[Paul Bell]

Ah, fumbling in the dark, anticipating the map of sensuality.
High peaks, low peaks, getting lost in fun.
This will be happening during the day now. Small consolation to the grim news we hear, but still a consolation.

[Betty Hermelee]

Paul, thanks you for your kind critique, Betty

[Lea Sheryn]

Lovely and delightful. True love is often blind love.

[Betty Hermelee]

Sorry it took so long to say thank you!!!

[Lea Sheryn]

Sorry it took so long to say you're welcome!

[R.E. Ray]

Betty, not only well crafted and delivered haiku, but scenes we can imagine, perhaps two lying together in the dark, touching and doing all the fun and silly things lovers do. Another remarkable work.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for valuable comments always

[R.E. Ray]

You're welcome, Betty.

[Poetic Beauty]

Those private personal moments that make each relationship unique and loving.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for your comment! I will read your work, Fondly, Betty

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome

[barleygirl]

I love your depiction of love's intimacies as being quirky & lively. Each poem stands well alone & the trio makes a great flow of imagery for all the senses. This is as far as one can get from the predictable junk I hate to see in many love poems! *smile* And yet you present simple recognizable fondnesses! Fondly, Margie

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Margie, you're so perceptive!!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we don't need to see to love, we feel to love...
aptly expressed here in such sensual terms....
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Jacob as always, spot on!!!