THREE STUDIES

HAIKU; thee people

THREE STUDIES

FAITH

If I can believe

in a healer, I'm content

but I can't find one.

MOONLIT

Let me seduce you

to my moonlit planet Hope

and never leave it

REALITY?

Her angelic face

traps me in a trance-like calm

yet she is not real.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like how these three Senryu can act alone...but as a trio, they work to tell a never ending story...
nicely done, Betty...
Faith is the toughest...to believe in what we can't see, and often can't feel...
and the reality often is we get a false sense of calm, just before the storm hits...the storm being quite real.
j.

[bigfootprint]

Your haiku format works well, Betty. It is challenging to remain both grammatical and prosaic. The short words allow room to achieve eloquence. Nice blend of topics and imagery. I might have gone for a "Your shadowy face" to strengthen the mood and narrative sequence. Good job.

[barleygirl]

#3 - my fave cuz it's so evocative of many ways we delude ourselves.
#1 - next fave cuz the last line is contrary & unexpected.
#2 - I'm stuck on how the grammar feels clunky . . .
. . . . . "let me seduce you & never leave it" (doesn't sound right)

Most of all, I love your plan to use 3 haiku named for life concepts while suggesting this is 3 different people . . . nicely thought-provoking! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lea Sheryn]

An nteresting trio of thoughts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

on the way to visit my folks for so many years
along interstate 40...they lived in Whispering Pines....
I would stay over night in Black Mountain....beautiful place...
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very interesting poem. Sometimes it's hard to differniate between reality and fiction.