BRILLIANCE

Nature: Green spring, color (Brevity)

Scrupulous green brilliance

splashes of pink, yellow

summer's sun kisses

surges of downpours nourish

until....

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the first line becuz your use of the word "scrupulous" is startling . . . but after I thought a while, it's a great way to describe how green spring can be. Frankly, I'm not a fan of using primary color words when there are so many other ways to say "green" or "yellow" . . . these are places where it can be fun to try a comparison . . . yellow as (what?) . . . splashes of harmony . . . you can do this better than me, but you get my idea! *smile* Also I love poems that do not end with some definite pronouncement or point. I love giving the reader a chance to fill in the blanks, which makes your poem interactive. Readers like to be piqued, to define what this means to them! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lea Sheryn]

I love splashes of color. Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

rainbows can fool us after a storm...we might overlook what damage has been done, and see through rose colored glasses...love can fool us the same way.
j.

[bigfootprint]

Very nice exercise in alliteration, Betty. So many images and implications. A veritable seasonal bouquet of metaphor. Make me wonder if there was an assignment or contest entry. You capture a summer day and leave us with angst -- will what follows be opulence or disaster?

[alanwgraham]

Hi Betty, I read this earlier then came back to read it again. I can see now that your meaning runs from one line to the next. I always struggle myself how much to punctuate in these looser poems. You have painted a nice word picture of the scintillating brilliance of summer colours. Wished for as I look out at the grey of winter.
Regards.
Alan

[Marie-Louise.]

This is a promise of summer. Lovely little poem

[wordman]

makes you wish for summer