FAKED OUT

HAIKU

I slowed my truck

a dead deer was in the road

hmm, or so I thought

Author's Note

please; a kind crtique

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Betty,

As gentle and beautiful as deer can appear to be, they can also be very dangerous creatures when confronted of frightened ... I have had a few incidents with deer on the highway, one in which a deer was standing beside the passenger side of the road as I approached in the darkness of the wee hours of early morning in my company van, and about the time that I came to be alongside the dear, the deer decided to bolt and run across the road, slamming with a powerfully loud thud into the side door of my company van ... Never new what happened to the deer, but when I got to the job I was headed towards, the side door was demolished, and that true to life incident was very difficult to explain to my superiors, as no one, including me, had ever heard of a deer hitting a moving vehicle, rather than a vehicle hitting a deer ... Truth is, in reality, stranger than poetry ... And by the way, I enjoyed this little piece of nice Poetry ...

Marve

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Marve, forgot about this one!
Warmly, B

[Miss Sharon]

Ah yes...those wild critters can be tricky eh? I enjoyed this. ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks always Sharon !

[William Michael Reeves]

I felt something sinister was up in your Senryu. That maybe it wasn't a deer that got hit.

[Richard🖌]

I saw that you have a Haiku, Betty ⛩️

And, just had to stop in for a read.
It's a good one, with a great title and genuine surprise … I can only imagine a, supposedly, dead deer springing to life! 😳
You actually have a Senryu here, M'Dear, as Haiku is only about seasons and Nature, while Senryu has a human element and/or humorous theme. Check L1 for count: 5/7/5.
Whatever, I really enjoyed your Senryu … very few can actually pen a good one, but you've done an exemplary job with yours.

Warmest Winter Hugs 'n Happy Holiday Smiles, Dear Betty ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for reviewing dear Richard; I forgot to put in Senryu instead of Haiku, but next time I will,
Best to you and sweet holidays too!
B.

[Richard🖌]

Betty,
You make sharing a delightful pleasure. ; )

[mattavelli]

Hello, Betty! :)
I came back looking for the start of your Cool Joe, and stopped for a quick haiku. Its a good one. I imagine the deer got up and ran away. That could be startling.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're an angel MAT!!! I'd love your opinion on COOL JOE, but no rush!!!
Best, B

[Betty Hermelee]

PS Would you read my new one??

[mattavelli]

Hey, Betty! :)
I got distracted right when I found chapter one last night. I'll read it tonight or this weekend.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re an angel, it gets much better as chapters go along as I learned a lot about creating and writing