A Square World

A Square World

A Poem by Deepika

 

I locked myself within four walls-

Someday when I had a chaotic mind

Wondered how the earth doesn’t fall,

In spite of spinning round & round!

 

A ball pen rested on a table brown,

Kept her engaged; spilled her dark fluid,

Swirling thoughts, not sure of where they end,

Pulled them hard and laid them down!

 

One by one they decorated my book,

Fitting inside the perfectly spaced lines

Flushing the musings off the confined pack,

Mind was then freed from the confined chains!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2015 Deepika


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Really fantastic work....your lines are showering your feelings and emotions very well 😊

Posted 9 Years Ago


You really penned a wonderful poem in those perfectly spaced lines. You kept us engaged and spilled the emotions...Excellent...:).................

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepika

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Sami for your kind words :)
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
As always so well written and thought out!
I too love the descriptions given in this piece,
well done my talented friend!



Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepika

9 Years Ago

Means a lot! Thanks James :)
This is a great peom with a special message inside.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepika

9 Years Ago

Thanks yo dear friend :)
A complete evacuation of those thoughts and musings so that clarity can be enjoyed - spring-cleaning but not throwing anything away - giving them a new home together for all time.
I loved the, almost surprised tone, that each of them fitted between the lines - as it was ordained - superb write Deepika

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepika

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the lovely comment Anto :))
WoW!!!
awesome awesome...........awesome!!!
vivid perfect description.......
i loved it!!!
:)
btw........long time no see......all well?

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepika

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Pushkar! :) Yep..been long time writing. Wanted to make sure my mind still works ;)
Pushkar Prabhat

9 Years Ago

WoW!!!! that happens with me a lot...........seems like yours works just fine!!!! :D :D
Deepika

9 Years Ago

haha..kinda :D
Its great. Like when I took the pen and gazed the sky for nothing.
Wonderful creation dear. I like this stanza most.

A ball pen rested on a table brown,
Kept her engaged; spilled her dark fluid,
Swirling thoughts, not sure of where they end,
Pulled them hard and laid them down!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Deepika

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much dear friend! :)

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Deepika
Deepika

bangalore, karnataka, India



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