Innocence vs Maturity

When I was a kid, was worried about a broken tooth & hesitated to smile,

I got replacement for that broken tooth at a later point of time,

Now I’ve got a broken heart & still manage to portray a forceful grin

For I’ve realized my mind should guide me and the heart will mend

 

When I was using pencil, I believed eraser was a powerful tool,

But it diminished when my mistakes multiplied,

Now I find memories as the ultimate power,

For they accumulate with time and have no means to delete

 

When I first encountered equations in chemistry I freaked out,

With practice I could get around any difficult calculations

Now I deal with unbalanced life & calmly wait for the moments

For patience is the key to any unresolved ordeals

 

There was a time I feared going to clinic, just ‘cause of the injections,

But those doses helped me cure and grab another ice-cream

Now I fancy getting a tattoo as the pain has become secondary,

But the tattoo would leave me with a mark that’ll never vanish

 

In the fairy tales I waited to hear ‘Happily Ever after’

For the tangled story culminated in a gleeful climax

Now I’m perplexed how monotonicity could make a life happy,

For the tangles in the fairy tale is what makes it that fascinating!

 

 

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

"When I was using pencil, I believed eraser was a powerful tool,
But it diminished when my mistakes multiplied,
Now I find memories as the ultimate power,
For they accumulated with time and had no means to delete" - this could be a wonderful stand-alone poem Deepika. Its real top-notch writing. The metaphor is class!!

"monotonicity" - excellent word - loved it!

I like the end of this too. The realisation that living happily ever after might actually get quite boring lol. What a super take on Fairy tale endings. Life happens when we are waiting around for something to happen (paraphrasing really badly - sorry Deepika) .
I like the attitude in this and the constant referring back to younger days and contrasting them (using the prism of so-far-lived life) with life as it is now for the narrator. Very enjoyable!
:)

[Deepika]

You have a way to get to the exact context of what I actually want to say and I'm truly grateful to you about that as your comments make my intentions more clear:) True, even paradise turns boring if once it turns into a routine. Thanks dear friend :)

[ANTO]

Paradise turns boring - wow - perhaps thats why Eve ate the apple
You're very welcome Deepika. thank you for the RR.
;)

[AaronFreitas]

"When I was a kid, was worried about a broken tooth & hesitated to smile,
I got replacement for that broken tooth at a later point of time,
Now I’ve got a broken heart & still manage to portray a forceful grin
For I’ve realized my mind should guide me and the heart will mend"

I really love the opening stanza my friend. You described beautifully the insecurities we have as children. We look back now and it's silly but it was such a big deal in that moment. Good work!

[Deepika]

Really true! Things we once were worried about seem funny now :) Thanks a lot Aaron!

[Ana B.]

a very beautiful pallete of wonderful , deep thoughts...i don't know if i told you before, but i'm a fan. Keep posting my dear :)

[Deepika]

That means a lot! Thank you so much Ana :))

[Kousika]

Nice thoughts.. Where do you get thoughts like this dear.. Your poems are really unique..
I luvd this..
Especially, the use of examples like equation and chemistry..
pencil and eraser..
kid and broken tooth.. Gives a great touch..

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Kousika :)) Glad you liked it!

[Sami Khalil]

So many things change between innocence and maturity and so many stages are realized. You share that experience marvelously with us...Excellent...:)........

[Deepika]

Thank you for your kind words sami :))

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....

[Gurleen Saluja]

Awesome write. Great to have read it. Innocence vs maturity- aptly titled. Thanks for sharing :)

[Deepika]

Thank you gurleen for stopping by :) glad you liked it!

[Jamestown]

You really made a solid point in this amazing piece!
The last stanza really summed it up for me, for the tangles
In the fairy tale is what made it so fascinating:) I completely
agree and understand this fantastic and inspirational write,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Deepika]

Thank you so much James :)) glad you found it interesting!

[CA Anurag Sharma]

No words left to praise you Deepika ji :) .... but certainly something is lacking in this poem... I cant criticize your work but it has left me wanting for something more.... it started with a bang... may be the start was too brilliant.... please dont mind my words as I am big fan of your writings....but....

[Deepika]

I'm flattered ;) Criticisms are welcome :P That means a lot Anurag :) Well I agree with you, generally I fine tune my poems before publishing, say make it more rhythmic.. but this time it I let my thoughts flow freely. It's hasn't got the right syntax of a poem.. just wanted to express what came to my mind. So yea..I agree it can be much better :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

I am sorry if I sounded harsh...

[Deepika]

No it wasn't..thanks anurag for your honest feedback :)

[Sourav]

Life teaches everything. When you grow up you face the life as it is and get lots of surprises! Nice one.

[Deepika]

Thanks Sourav for stopping by :) True, life's unravels it's surprises in the course of time some of which are pleasant while others are unwelcome

[stansg]

Good work Deepika. Especially liked the part about chemical equations, dimaag kharab hota tha chemical equations dekh kar; but now we patiently solve much more complicated equations of life.

[Deepika]

lol..You are right! The level of problems that we can deal with, now is higher. Thanks for the review :)