Innocence vs Maturity

When I was a kid, was worried about a broken tooth & hesitated to smile,

I got replacement for that broken tooth at a later point of time,

Now I’ve got a broken heart & still manage to portray a forceful grin

For I’ve realized my mind should guide me and the heart will mend

 

When I was using pencil, I believed eraser was a powerful tool,

But it diminished when my mistakes multiplied,

Now I find memories as the ultimate power,

For they accumulate with time and have no means to delete

 

When I first encountered equations in chemistry I freaked out,

With practice I could get around any difficult calculations

Now I deal with unbalanced life & calmly wait for the moments

For patience is the key to any unresolved ordeals

 

There was a time I feared going to clinic, just ‘cause of the injections,

But those doses helped me cure and grab another ice-cream

Now I fancy getting a tattoo as the pain has become secondary,

But the tattoo would leave me with a mark that’ll never vanish

 

In the fairy tales I waited to hear ‘Happily Ever after’

For the tangled story culminated in a gleeful climax

Now I’m perplexed how monotonicity could make a life happy,

For the tangles in the fairy tale is what makes it that fascinating!

 

 

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

"When I was using pencil, I believed eraser was a powerful tool,
But it diminished when my mistakes multiplied,
Now I find memories as the ultimate power,
For they accumulated with time and had no means to delete" - this could be a wonderful stand-alone poem Deepika. Its real top-notch writing. The metaphor is class!!

"monotonicity" - excellent word - loved it!

I like the end of this too. The realisation that living happily ever after might actually get quite boring lol. What a super take on Fairy tale endings. Life happens when we are waiting around for something to happen (paraphrasing really badly - sorry Deepika) .
I like the attitude in this and the constant referring back to younger days and contrasting them (using the prism of so-far-lived life) with life as it is now for the narrator. Very enjoyable!
:)

[Deepika]

You have a way to get to the exact context of what I actually want to say and I'm truly grateful to you about that as your comments make my intentions more clear:) True, even paradise turns boring if once it turns into a routine. Thanks dear friend :)

[ANTO]

Paradise turns boring - wow - perhaps thats why Eve ate the apple
You're very welcome Deepika. thank you for the RR.
;)

[Najam Us Saher]

I am left speechless after reading this. What a creative and unique write. The way you compared and connected two different things is just mind blowing. I totally loved it.

[Sandipta$]

At childhood we cry loudly to get what we like,but when we grown up,we cry silently to forget what we like......

[Solar]

The law of diminishing returns!

How even peak experiences grow dull - aptly versed.

I like your neologism 'monotonicity'

[Mitali Shah]

excellent... somewhere deep in our pasts we all have gone through this phase of reality

[Deepika]

You are right! Thanks Mitali for your kind review :)

[Avinash]

No matter what you do not stop living. If old memories haunt, make new ones...Beautiful ones. I too have myself spent long pondering(20 yrs to be precise) over injustice and unfairness of life and meanwhile stopped living my life and now realize one thing we should never indulge in...is regrets.

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Avinash for your beautiful review :) You are totally right!

[Double T]

Your poem is not only deep, but it is also meaningful.

[Deepika]

Thanks dear friend :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

aap itna acha kaise likh lete ho ?? very nice title totaly suitable for a marvellous poem

[Deepika]

Aww..Thank you so much! :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

your always welcome

[Abilash Uttama]

It's amazing how our thinking changes with time, and slowly we realize that the hurdles, problems are the elements that make our life thrilling. Good one :)

[Deepika]

You got my point :) thanks abilash for your review!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

what a fantastic take on life..........
the innocent childhood.......mature adulthood...........
rather it should be mature childhood.............innocent adulthood.........too much ho gaya na??? appologies!

beautiful poem!!!
i loved it!!
:)

[Deepika]

I didn't categorize the acts as mature or innocent...so you can take them as you like XD Thanks for the review Pushkar :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

hey all........she did it.......i did not................again, too much right?.............
you are welcome.............!!! :) :)

[Emily]

Nice wording!
Well done!!

[Deepika]

Thanks Emily! :)