A Blind girl

In the voice of a girl who looses her pleasure of sight one day..

I hope my fave red dress didn’t fade after laundry,

I believe the moon is still focused over my territory,

I wish I could have a glimpse of my crush somewhere,

Mirror no more can lie to me that I look all fair

 

Where does my once admired eye now stare?

Did the sun loose his charm & hide behind the sea forever?

Cockroach can no more scare me with her long antenna,

Dark mascara has penetrated beyond my eyelids till my retina

 

Don’t use glycerin, I no more can see your tears honey,

Neither sympathize me, I just don’t need any,

Glittering things still don’t fall under my list of fallacy,

There’s a deeper pain hidden in me than the fire of jealousy

 

I might have no sight, but definitely a vision,

Pumping the red blood is still my heart’s mission,

Ears have become smarter to the waves that it receive,

My skin urges for the warmth that’ll never deceive!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[BlankCypher]

I like the idea behind this very much! People take sight for granted, they don't realise how much it can reduce your quality of life to be unable to see, forcing you to dwell entirely on your own thoughts with no visual stimulation to distract yourself. It's a very strong piece and the irony behind it most definitely isn't lost.
Great poem, well done!

[Deepika]

Great interpretation! Thank you much dear friend for your valuable comment :)

[Sarah Hobbit]

I love how you put this poem, it really touch's my heart, makes me 'see'.
Well done on a great piece. :-)

[Deepika]

That means a lot! Thanks dear friend :)

[Mayank]

The concept is brilliant as well as imagery and the words are touching... good write.

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Mayank :)

[Nikhil Patidar]

just one word...wow!! so beautifully crafted the grey corners of a broken heart...literally, wow.

[Deepika]

That means a lot! Thanks Nikhil :)

[hussain]

either you are blind or a genius.

[Deepika]

I'm humbled that I could convey the emotions that well :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

Don't use glycerin, i no more can see your tears honey..
i liked this line very much

[Deepika]

Thank you Harpreet, glad you liked it :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

your welcome

[Jeyanthi]

Its very powerful !!!

But I hope God has also created too many kind hearts to help them too.

[Deepika]

So true! Thanks a lot jeyanthi for your kind review :)

[Double T]

This is a great poem with a great message in it.

Writing 5/5

Imagery 4.4/5

Message 4.9/5

[Deepika]

Thank you for the kind review dear friend :)

[Saddam]

Its a fantastic write.
Lovely creation and imagination.
Remarkable piece.

[Deepika]

Thank you Saddam :))

[Cool Girl]

Precious and beautiful.. Remarkable piece :)

[Deepika]

Thank you dear friend :)

[Cool Girl]

Welcome!!! :)