Never give up

There’s a day following every night,

Life’s a struggle, just don’t forget

Take the charge and design your pace,

You’ll soon know the meaning of your existence

 

Moon is never weary of cooling the earth,

With several hard hits an Idol takes its birth,

Earth with no shows revolves round the sun,

Soul saved from a storm gives you life’s lesson

 

Death is something that’s just inevitable,

Don’t let any pain make you feeble,

You might never get all that you wish for,

Yet all are equal in the eyes of the creator

 

Time’s tick is your invitation to walk with it,

Ever advancing time has got to teach you a lot,

Some day those lessons serve you as a guide,

Towards your goal happily make a stride!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Emily]

'Death is something that’s just inevitable/
Great line!
Well done!

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot Emily :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Motivational and inspirational, Really a poem with a positive attitude, I like it

[Deepika]

Thank you Hardeep for your kind words :)

[ANTO]

I feel this is your best yet Deepika. The wisdom abounds and as hard as some of those gems of wisdom that we glean from Life, to put into words are - let alone in eloquent writes like this - you really nailed it here.
I was really impressed by this - your final stanza
"Time’s tick is your invitation to walk with it,
Ever advancing time has got to teach you a lot,
Some day those lessons serve you as a guide,
Towards your goal happily make a stride!" - flawless.

Well done Deepika. :))

[Deepika]

Thanks much Anto for your appreciation :) I'm pleased that you like my work :)

[Jamestown]

Always one of my favorites to read for sure, fabulous message
love this one " don't let any pain make you feeble " so true!
Thanks for sharing your amazing poetry! PTL

[Deepika]

Thank you so much james :) I'm grateful to you!

[Jamestown]

Welcome:) b-blessed!

[Double T]

It's is a poem that you can read to your kid when he has a bad day. This is poem about never giving up on what you believe and I like it, alot.

Writing: 4.9/5
Theme: 5/5
Imagery: 4/5

[Deepika]

Thank you dear friend :) that means a lot!

[Kuldeep desai]

good one......reading a poem after a long time and i read the good one.........I like ur style in approaching the concept of the poems...........

[Deepika]

Thank you kuldeep :) glad you like my writing style!

[wordman]

a beautiful write, life is many lessons and it is a slow pace, it takes a life time
to really under stand I beleive and some never learn

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot for the kind review! :)

[wordman]

you are welcome

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Good one....a good write ...

[Deepika]

Thank you Anurag :))

[Rounak Jain]

as awesome as always.
You might never get all that you wish for,

Yet all are equal in the eyes of the creator.. this was the best.
Shall I pin point all I learnt in those 16 sentences? :)

[Deepika]

Wow..thanks a lot Rounak :) would be glad to have your valuable feedback on the piece ! :))