Inner Beauty

Shining stars are sumptuous illusion,

You try getting closer and they just burn

Glittering diamond looks absolutely fine,

Yet, it’s nothing more than a tough stone

 

Personality is just an outer norm,

You decorate it with pearls and gem

But character is an inner facet,

It’s worth more than things hidden in a closet

 

Does flawless skin define your appeal?

I can bleach my skin and look aesthetic

You say there’s an end to my cosmetic?

I say there’s an end to your glamour as well

 

How long can you pretend as a pleaser?

Someday you’ll fall under pressure

If you ever had inner beauty,

It’d follow you till your eternity

 

Gold is hidden deep down,

Roses are surrounded by thorn,

Lotus opens up in a stinky pond,

Inner beauty’s got no correspond!

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Abdul Rahman S]

Deepika..This is a great piece of writing. The way you have used your words are really nice.This poem makes a strong statement indeed about inner beauty which I too personally believe in.There is nothing great of looking handsome from outside and having a killer heart inside you..Well written poem.

I will definitely give 95/100..

[Deepika]

Thank you Abdul :) that means a lot :)

[Double T]

I really got to say you've done a great job of writing this poem. I love the way you use the imagery for visuals. I can tell it was smart. I also like the way you let the metaphors and imagery do the talking of the theme. And speaking of the theme, its great to know how you intreperite the dark side of being a star. It's so amazing. But overall I'll have to give this poem a 5/5

Writing 5/5
Imagery 4.9/5
Story telling 5/5

[Deepika]

Thank you so much dear friend :) Glad you like it! :)

[Emily]

I really like this one!
Well done!
keep it up!

[Deepika]

Thank you Emily! :)

[Avinash]

I will say these are right words in right direction and spoken in right way but there is lot between the spaces left. Life lessons indeed.

[Deepika]

Thank you Avinash for your kind words :))

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Another gem from you... its quite true... i liked the message behind it

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Anurag :))

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Someone seems to be too busy now-a-days... :)

[Jamestown]

You couldn't have said it any better and what an amazing
topic, so true and a powerful piece that everyone should
take seriously, 4th stanza gets a BRAVO! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot James:) You are highly encouraging :)

[AaronFreitas]

I love the message behind these words... very deep meaning. The final stanza really stood out and was excellent. Good work :)

[Deepika]

Thank you Aaron:) Glad you liked it :)

[AaronFreitas]

No problem :) If you get a chance check out my newest poem :)

[ANTO]

There is so much wisdom imparted by this write.

Upon reading this Deepika, I remembered a saying 'You can't make a silk purse out of a sow's ear' - things that are worthless can't be made valuable by peripheral adornments ("...things hidden in a closet...") - same goes for people. Outer beauty is fleeting.

I was very impressed by the final stanza with its creative examples and the punchline.
Thank you for the RR dear poet. :))

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Anto for your kind review :))

[Ana B.]

A very deep poem, with an important message and meaning, love the last stanza. Great work my friend :)

[Deepika]

thanks a lot Ana :) Glad you liked it :)

[Abilash Uttama]

wonderful piece, it's your inner beauty that matters for what's in the comely beauty which deplete as time flees. nice work as always senior :)

[Deepika]

thank you my junior for your kind insight :))