All-Littered Life

 

Ailing Affronts,

Burning Bruises,

Injurious Incidents

Expensive Experiences

Threatening Thoughts,

Screaming Silence

Quaking Quarrels,

Misleading Morals

 

Reckless Rejections,

Hopeless Hopes

Lewd Lust,

Virtual Vanity

 

Dreadful Displeasure,

Unanticipated upshot

Wistful waltz,

Perilous plots

 

Fearsome fights

Chaining cuffs,

Oppressed orphans,

Needless narcissism

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

Great alliteration Deepika - and the title is one I wish I'd created lol

I was checking for a hidden acrostic or even anagrams thinking you had booby-trapped this in some way - such is your reputation with the pen.

I could see tis being read aloud at a poetry night, with vigour.

So this is where we (humanity) are at now - makes for a terrible Curriculum Vitae for our species.

I did find a little ray of hope in this - lets say it was an 'unanticipated upshot' of reading this ;p
Very cool Deepika - done with confident style. :)

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Anto :) Great expectations from me, I'm humbled ;) The title and the writing are linked, I wrote 2 lines that had alliterations which I later realized, that's when I thought of the title, and with the title I got an idea to a add line beginning with each alphabet, but it was difficult :P(esp. for letters like x and z) .Didn't think of anagrams :P

[ANTO]

Its a great result from an exercise designed to push the poets limits - its the gym for the poets quill, pen-training if you will. ;))

[Deepika]

you can say so! :D

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

it is a very very nice poem

[Deepika]

Thank you so much! :)

[Saddam]

I love the whim chim nature of write. You put here a very fantastic art of old craft into new frame. Great, I love it. I tried many times but after three or four lines it lost the rhythm. Your write is amazing.

[Deepika]

thank you so much Saddam for your beautiful review :))

[Saddam]

You are golden hand dear, You are most welcome, always.

[Nikhil Patidar]

wow!! its fab...such a wonderful collection of words that i had to open a dictionery for every sentence. great job deepika.

[Deepika]

haha..thanks Nikhil :) Myself took aid of dictionary for few words XD this was an exercise for me to enrich vocabulary :P

[Pushkar Prabhat]

very clever..............intriguing!!!
absolutely loved it!!!
:)

[Deepika]

Thank you Pushkar :) Glad you loved it:)

[Jeyanthi]

Your adjectives are creeping me out, now i have to be alert of my own alliterations :P.

I enjoyed your work Deepika. :)

[Deepika]

lol..thanks Jeyanthi :D

[~]

I hope this all-littered life, goes ahead and has its alteration soon. Clever word choices to convey a striking meaning Deepika.

[Deepika]

thank you so much moonskittles :))

[closed]

i like to use this style of writing sometimes

it can be a good way to express an idea without going into alot of detail or ''exposition'' so to speak


good write


-Dream

[Deepika]

true..thanks dear friend for dropping by :)

[Avinash]

It sounds like an apt social commentary. Words hit like hammer here.

[Deepika]

haha..thanks Avinash :))

[nazia]

The alliterations just stole my heart away.. phenomenal write..
I wish the world you described takes a correct turn and be better :)

[Deepika]

Thank you so much nazia :)) if i could think of the poem title as 'glittering life' instead of littered life;)

[Ana B.]

I love it! Your chosen nickname suits you - your works are have a very deep meaning :)

[Deepika]

Thanks ana :D that's actually my name and it means light..glad you find my poems deep :)

[Ana B.]

oh, nevertheless it suits you :)