Life or Death?

In some unusual moment I met with an accident,

Doctor says- time to face a fair game of Life and Death,

All that has gotta work now is my inner strength,

I'm given a choice between Elsewhere & the Earth!

One world comes into Life when I close my eyes,

The other one wants me to be wide-eyed and wise,

‘Elsewhere’ doesn't clear me if it's heaven or hell

Either of them is gonna give me some new thrill!

 

Heaven must be a delight to go as Dad would be awaiting there,

He must be bored without any dear ones to visit so far,

I can live those moments that just got rusted in my thoughts,

Or the ones that take birth just in my Dreams in the Night,

What if I end up in hell as I've been too fortunate so far?

I'll be bullied by that ruffian who’s sure to be weeping there,

Ahh.. these bumps have sufficiently shown me the hell,

“They'll only take away my breath”, with a pain I yell!

 

What would my mom do without me or Dad in this World,

Won't my siblings want those moments that'll soon turn old?

Forever my dreams will dissolve if I choose the former,

I would be a matter of gossip for some days to my Neighbor,

What if there's another layer between Life and Death?

Then my soul miserably floats like a weightless ghost!

Will that be an end of the concept of fate and faith?

Is there a way to come back here when I get bored at last!

 

While thoughts kept swirling, a nurse injected anesthesia,

They were all suppressed along with the days of insomnia!

 

 

 

 

 

  

Reviews

[ANTO]

Theres nothing like going under the surgeons knife to bring all to mind Deepika. The mundane is overtaken by the theological and philosophical, the ethereal and the unreal. This has some fine poginancy injected (sorry for that pun) but also feirly healthy helpings of humour also - I lolled at Old Nick being termed 'a ruffian' - which is really quite an English thing to say.
The reader is left at the end with all those questions while the writer drifts off in peaceful sleep in 10....9....8....zzzzzzzzzzzz
The best sleep I ever had was under anaesthetic ;p
Good one Deepika

[Deepika]

I agree with you Anto! When things go smoothly in life, we tend to have a greater affinity towards the life here on earth. Just wanted to put my character into a situation that demands her to choose her destination in a very short span. With the physical pain and the mental agony, which way can give a fast relief!
And yea didn't wanna make it too philosophical, so added some humor :D
lolled at my own write after reading your comment--"The reader is left at the end with all those questions while the writer drifts off in peaceful sleep in 10....9....8....zzzzzzzzzzzz"
Thanks a lot for your valuable words :))

[Calliope]

This was far more lighthearted and whimsical than the title suggests, which I found to be an engaging surprise. Overall, I love how each individual stanza succeeds in making you think. Stunning job!

[Deepika]

Thanks friend for dropping :) Glad you liked it!

[Devanshu Rajput]

First being overwhelmed by your thoughts, then I ended with a smile upon my face. Reading this reminds, me of The Divine Comedy, by Dante Alighieri. I guess you would have heard of it. In this book, the poet embarks, on journey of hell. In it hell is a place where, the creatures called The Shades reside, getting tormented in accordance of their sins.

Well, I digressed from the path!!!!!!!!!!OPES!!!!!!

Your poem is a masterpiece for me. The last para, was a clever one...........

Devanshu

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Devanshu! I'm humbled by your words :))

[Abilash Uttama]

liked it, i too think like this sometimes. the life after death what it would be like meeting the loved ones and at the same time leaving the loved ones. Nice Work !

[Deepika]

Glad you could relate with my writing. Thanks Abilash :))

[Abilash Uttama]

it's always a pleasure to read your work :)

[Deepika]

I'm flattered ;)

[Shivalik Kalsotra]

wonderful,truth very well expressed...words are usual but underlying meaning is very deep, a critical thinking, a gate to new synthesis of thought process...superlike

[Deepika]

Thanks Shivalik for dropping by and for your kind words :) Have a great day!

[child of God]

This is a wonderful Poam it was a pleasure to read I am not the best of reviewers not very help ful sorry about that anyways thank you for sharing
Broken Girl

[Deepika]

Thank you dear friend :) glad you liked it.

[Sophy Freebirds]

This would better be under the category -story or chapter(if it has other parts) .Because it doesn't seem as poem to me.. But may be thats just me.I have always been intrigued by afterlife.Thats the main theme of my many poems.The way you used stream of thought to psycho-analyse the theme in young brain is really nice .Another thing humour here just made me giggle-anaesthesia gives insomnia(ultimate pirony) . *keep writing*. Thanks for dropping by my page

~Sophy

[Deepika]

Thanks Sophy for your review :)) Perhaps you are right as my writings are away from the expected syntax of a poem, more like an informal prose. Glad that you liked the theme and found the write humorous :) Have a good day :)

[Prashant Rajput]

an exceptional writing...you've narrated a sad tale in a very beautiful manner.I really liked it.

[Deepika]

Thank you Prashant :) Glad to have you back after a while!

[Rounak Jain]

Beautiful, some wise sentences hit me. Overall a good way to represent whats going on in someone's mind who is floating in between life/death.

[Deepika]

Thanks Rounak :))

[Fist]

Perfection redefined. That's what i'll call this poem. I really like your poems. They give a better view of human life.

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot for dropping by and liking my poems :))