Mosquito here's your song

I was into a deep sleep that one night,

Until you woke me up with your ugly hard bite

I couldn't resist but gave myself a tight slap

And you just managed to escape through the space of my fingers gap

 

Next night you came back at the same time

Making some new plots to commit some severe crime

This time my guard was a vermin coil

You had no way to but envy seeing your plan spoil

 

Then came a night when I was gasping some fresh air outside

You were just watching over me eagle - eyed

It couldn't be any concession from a blood sucker

Perhaps you'd just had a splendid night supper

You came to entertain me with some of your old song

And I just left you to live your life a little long

 

Hats off for your adamancy you tiny little dot

But this time you were helpless while you were being caught

You fell off on the ground with your broken wing

Now I've got a new lyrics for you to sing!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rounak Jain]

I like it the way you pick up ideas to write about. Mentioning each and every bit of observation in the writing. A correction --- space of my fingers gap. 'Space' being said, should 'gap' be written?

[Deepika]

Okay..'Space' seems redundant there. Thanks for the correction and your appreciation :))

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

I'm not sure if anyone in this world living or dead would have written a poetry on a mosquito :P ever... When I first say the heading.. I was like... "really?!! wah??"... jokes apart... if mosquitoes do learn to read.. your poetry would definitely sting them:P

[Deepika]

Haha..I'm eligible to set a record at guinness book with this piece :D at least fortunate as mosquitoes cannot read it :P Thanks for your lovely comments..Made me smile:)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Anytime:) Anywhere:)

[Roshan Nair]

Lol, if only most indians looked at it this way, my house would have a lot less yelling because of this damn being :P
Great and funny write deepika :) I liked how you animate things without life and beings that can't express. great work :) cheers

[Deepika]

Thank you roshan! Glad that you enjoyed it:)

[Prashant Pandey]

humoristic , made me laugh. nicely written.

[Deepika]

Thank you Prashant :)

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Hahaha! Loved it! Unique, refreshing and a definitely good read! Excellent job, Deepika!

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot! :) Glad you enjoyed it :)

[Saddam]

Hahaha............ enjoyable write.

[Deepika]

Thank you :D

[Ana B.]

smart and funny :) a very nice and interesting write

[Deepika]

Thanks Ana :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

haha...good one....enjoyed it :)

[Deepika]

Glad that you liked it :)

[Astrid]

It's a very cute poem ~ :)

[Deepika]

Thanks for your time :)

[Prashant Rajput]

awesome!...very entertaining work,the lyrical sequence is excellent.

[Deepika]

Thanks Prashant :)