If I could..

If I could move back in time and space,

Would redefine my actions to cause no regrets in any case

 

 If I could refine my dreams or my sight,

Would just rewind to the sweetest point every night

 

If I could filter my memories,

Would erase all of them that contain tragedies

 

If I could fly high like a kite,

Would have to spend on no flight

 

Coz 'if I could' is more luring than 'what I should',

And all that my mind needs is just the fantasy as a food

Reviews

[Roshan Nair]

That last line was the icing indeed! your rhymes are simple yet impactful, I like that the most about how you structure your work, other than the 2 lined stanas. Refreshing ! :) cheers

[Deepika]

Thank you Roshan :)

[Astrid]

I believe you were trying to make it say:

"If I could move back in time and space,
I would redefine my actions to cause no regrets in any case

If I could refine my dreams or my sight,
I would just rewind to the sweetest point every night

If I could filter my memories,
I would erase all of them that contain tragedies

If I could fly high like a kite,
I wouldn't have to spend time on a flight

'Cause 'if I could' is more luring than 'what I should',
And all that my mind needs is just the fantasy as a food"

[Deepika]

Yep..that's exactly what I meant. Found 'I' redundant in every second sentence. Perhaps that could've made it more meaningful. Thanks for the correction:)

[Astrid]

No problem :) Glad to help!

[Prashant Rajput]

wonderful work...you've showcased your desire to act in different ways is really interesting.I really like it.

[Deepika]

Mere fantasies ;) thank you :)

[Saddam]

If I could move back in time and space,
Would redefine my actions that can cause no regrets in any case.

After hit by any trouble, we often think about it... IF I COULD! But it is all know it is not possible because that time have gave us an experience to be remember, learn.
Your art is beautiful. I'll pray for your wish so that "you could"

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot buddy :)