Heart.

I pour wine in my glass as I pour my heart out to you. 
I wipe the lipstick off of my teeth while you lie through yours.
You hold on to your pride while you should be holding on to my hand.
I feel my heart shatter instead of feeling butterflies in my stomach.
I taste tears in my mouth instead of your kisses.
I immortalize you with my words while you neglect me with yours.

So here… Lets have a toast to all of the mountains we didn’t move. All of the things you didn’t do right and all of the times I chose to love you anyway. I pray that somewhere between all of the words I failed to say to you, I forgive myself and move on…

-Benita Paloja

Reviews

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An apt title....pouring out the heart, but for the wrong reasons.

Your poem has a delicate, yet stern intensity throughout. Your alternating lines between your actions and the actions of the other are very inspired, and they combine to help the poem reach a satisfying conclusion.

Very neat writing.

[Alessander]

I like how you link sentiments and imagary.

pride/hand
heart/stomach
Tears/kisses

There's a lot of word play here, I esp like the line

"I wipe the lipstick off my teeth while you lie through yours"

That's awesome. It presents a very visceral image, one that is not "idealistic" but the "lying" is much worse.

Also the allusion to "faith moves mountains" and essentially inverting it, or misplaced faith doing nothing to mountains.

It keeps with the undercurrent of pain, disappointment and anger.

Good stuff.

[Benita Paloja]

thank you!

[Alessander]

No problem, Benita.
Unfortunately, I think I have an entire book on heartbreak lol

[Benita Paloja]

i would love to read it!

[Socioloverboy]

Intense. Fiery down to the last self reflective word.

[Alex]

I love this so much! Your words really moved me. I particularly loved 'lets have a toast to all of the mountains we didn't move', it sounds bitter but also sorrowful, it will stick with me!- well done and thanks for sharing.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

You hold on to your pride while you should be holding on to my hand.
I feel my heart shatter instead of feeling butterflies in my stomach.
I taste tears in my mouth instead of your kisses.
I immortalize you with my words while you neglect me with yours.


....The words in ur poetry hapnd with me in reality and certainly u wrote everything i wanted to write for so long but couldn't end up with perfect words and here u made such a talented beautifully raw piece of heart .I adore this poem ,amazing ! ''I Thank you for such a nice share ''

[Arsh]

Alas! What a beautiful heartfelt piece of your art!

My fav. lines: "I pour wine in my glass as I pour my heart out to you... " What a great starting of the write.. with such a worth-reading line. The choice of words's too very appreciable. Liked very verse of the write you've written with an ink of your emotions. Keep it up!

[Relic]

From your last posts including this one I can see someone has some poetic ranting to do. This is the place for it I guess. You express yourself in a way that's not overbearing. Love sucks sometimes. A broken heart sucks too. :(