To be honest with you, this piece is about me. I went through some hardships in several relationshi.. read moreTo be honest with you, this piece is about me. I went through some hardships in several relationships as others do. They taught me many things. I wrote this for someone who is a kindred spirit. He has been through many things as well. I'm still waiting. He has to get through his hurts. It may not be something that ever will be, but my heart continues to hope. Thank you for your interest in the piece. I appreciate your question.
6 Years Ago
Oh cool. Well I wish you the best
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much. You never know what is around the corner.
What an interesting excursion through a stormy romance. Life is full of twists and turns as much as those roads that lead us to where we might belong. I enjoyed the read.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Hey Fabian, thank you for stopping by to read my poem. This poem is more or less about learning fro.. read moreHey Fabian, thank you for stopping by to read my poem. This poem is more or less about learning from our mistakes. I've most certainly done that or tried to at the very least. Thank you again for reading. I am going to try to review one of yours today.
Wow! Talk about gut-wrenching emotion and baring your heart and soul!
This is a real tour de force, Belle. It runs the full gamut of emotions and depicts birth, death and rebirth of a romance graphically.
Terrific!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Wow, Iron! Talking about hitting the nail on the head. It's funny, when you live life, you gain un.. read moreWow, Iron! Talking about hitting the nail on the head. It's funny, when you live life, you gain understanding for the good in life. Thank you!!
I never cease to fall in love with the themes you convey.
I think the single word lines really play up the intensity and are a good addition.
I think your honesty is a big part of what makes your poems so good. You use is perfectly where is needed and I applaud you for it because I bet it’s not an easy thing to do.
All around enjoyed it! Thank you for writing such lovely poetry!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Hi, Hannah! Thank you so much for your kind words. I sincerely appreciate them. You detect honest.. read moreHi, Hannah! Thank you so much for your kind words. I sincerely appreciate them. You detect honesty because I am actually speaking from my heart. Thank you again! It means so much.
"bare" should be "bear" (I assume that's what you're intending to mean); "on" in the final stanza sounds and works better beginning the last line; and "it's" I think should simply be "it" (but frankly I personally don't like that kind of wording....it sounds a tad odd to me, but whatever works for you).
This is on the whole incredible! I loved the progression, the narrative, the flow is relatively nice, and the repetition is brilliant! Much enjoyed! Well done!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Hey, my Friend!! You know that spelling is not my forte. All offers of help are greatly appreciate.. read moreHey, my Friend!! You know that spelling is not my forte. All offers of help are greatly appreciated. It's funny that you mentioned the "on", I literally moved it 3 or 4 times trying to decide which way was best. I trust your thinking, so....... It has been changed. Thank you again for your consistency and kindness.