This reminded me of three things.
1] Never measure your pain to others. I think you got this across really well.
2] Kindness is not a weakness. A creed of mine and something we all appreciate over being demanded of something.
3] Understanding someone or something prevents a lot of misunderstandings. Kind of in the word, but growing up I made so many mistakes, had to do many terrible things to find my way, and now that I've found myself I don't wish things to be different for myself because its made me who I am but at the same time, everyone is different, and if there is a way I can spare someone the excess pain I will do my best.
You got all three of these points in this writing, in such a powerful and emotional way, conveyed so well and written well. Very good.
Also, understanding those who hurt us. I like this line and wisdom a lot better than "forgive for yourself not for who hurt you" because I think it's more fitting and better. For three/four years I struggled to overcome the physical and emotional abuse my father left on me and everyone kept telling me to forgive, but I couldn't, and still haven't but I got to understand him. Understand him and the situation, his past, and his history. By doing so I was able to let go and move on, but I don't forgive, and I don't forget.
Yes, you totally got what I was trying to say. This is a higher attitude, a higher state of being. .. read moreYes, you totally got what I was trying to say. This is a higher attitude, a higher state of being. Why should we spend time hating and in anguish over the wrongs done to us? We remove ourselves from this and move forth. Not everyone you meet is out to hurt you. Learn from the past, reinvent your future. The second you forget what you have been though, you cannot learn from it.
Thank you SO much for your comments. I am glad you understood what I wrote!! That means a great deal to me.
6 Years Ago
Haha, you're welcome and it's no problem at all. I'm rather the conversationalist so it's unlikely I.. read moreHaha, you're welcome and it's no problem at all. I'm rather the conversationalist so it's unlikely I'll refuse a conversation or review to someone's writing if I can relate to it.
What you just said reminds me of one of my favorite quotes "There is no fate, only the future we make for ourselves" and how holding grudges or hate or anguish over another is like drinking poison and expecting the other person to suffer. What I like to remember is that when I was in a bad place and people told me wise or smart-a*s advice I would brush it off but when I needed advice I remembered what they said, so I try my best not to judge someone immediately by what someone does or say. After all, if I'm terrible at first impressions it'd be hypocritical of myself to characterize someone the same way. Ugh, look at me writing another essay.
6 Years Ago
LOL... I like how you think. Nothing wrong with writing an essay.
Many people fin.. read moreLOL... I like how you think. Nothing wrong with writing an essay.
Many people find themselves in a bad place. It is all about what you do with it. You can feel sorry for yourself forever and never try anything new, or you can learn from the events in your past.
What a beautiful glimpse of pure love, of the strength that love can give us to rise above the painful places. Understanding is something the world needs so much more of now, day by day it seems the cuts grow deeper. May your words become a song to guide us all to a better world.
Thank you so much for your kind words!! When I wrote this poem, I actually cried. It meant a great.. read moreThank you so much for your kind words!! When I wrote this poem, I actually cried. It meant a great deal to me to write it. I wrote it for someone very special. After writing it, I actually think the poem helped me too. Thank you again for your kind words.
6 Years Ago
How beautiful to hear about the life of your poem, the depth of it that brought you to tears. And I .. read moreHow beautiful to hear about the life of your poem, the depth of it that brought you to tears. And I am thankful that the words helped bring you healing and peace.
6 Years Ago
Thank you again for your kind words to me. I hope the healing and peace goes farther than me.
I always like the sentiments in your poetry, and I think you know how to get your ideas across well.
The fifth stanza is my favorite, but I also really liked the lines
“These words at not for the spiteful/ they are for the injured out there”.
As well as the first line
“Understanding for those who hurt us”
I enjoyed reading!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
WOW!! Thank you so much, Hannah! I appreciate your thoughts on my poetry. I am inspired to write .. read moreWOW!! Thank you so much, Hannah! I appreciate your thoughts on my poetry. I am inspired to write now like I have never been inspired before. It helps to know that others enjoy reading what I have to say. Thank you, thank you, thank you!!
i like the poem for the realistic content, no one is exempted from experiencing pains,
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
I thought that I wrote you last night to thank you for your comments. I might not have. I apprecia.. read moreI thought that I wrote you last night to thank you for your comments. I might not have. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work. Thank you SO very much!!
6 Years Ago
no problem at all, i like reading them so i give reviews as well
This preaches a good message that everyone should take to heart. It flows well right down to a cool "don't forget" kind of ending that's a real kicker. If I may take my red pen to it:
-"Doesn't mean to distrust those who care" too wordy for the musicality, and there you go with your "to" again :p, but this time I know it gotta go. Better as "You should not distrust those who care" OR "It's best not to distrust....." (that way you can keep your "to").
-"vein" is the blood vein....."vain" is the "futile/useless" partner of "in" in the expression, "in vain"
This is otherwise fantastically written. Well done!
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Hey, you!!! You know that I NEVER mind your red pen. My weakness is my spelling!!! It is a huge f.. read moreHey, you!!! You know that I NEVER mind your red pen. My weakness is my spelling!!! It is a huge frustration point for me.
AND, just so you know, I took out the infamous "to". I agree with you this time and will not claim "poetic license"! LOL
Thank you so much for your help!!! I dearly love your advice!!
Very good spiritual advice in this one, though sometimes it's hard to practice it. Please do a spell check on the last word of line 2, verse 4.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you for your review! It means a great deal to me. I worried over the spelling of that word! .. read moreThank you for your review! It means a great deal to me. I worried over the spelling of that word! Thank you for your help!!!
BTW, I read your profile. I think it is nice of you to write trying to help others. I am doing the same thing.