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Any ideas for a title??

Every night, I lay awake,

Thinking of you.

The memories of the two of us together swarm in my head.

No matter how hard I try, I can’t let go.

I can’t get over you.

I know you didn’t mean to hurt me so,

But you did.

I’m willing to move on, though,

And forget about that all,

If you’ll just come back to me.

All I want is to hold you in my arms.

To hear you whisper in my ear,

Things like “I love you.”,

And “It’s all okay.”

But, you’ve already moved on.

Now, I can’t sleep at night,

Knowing that someone else gets to wake up every morning,

Next to you.

And that I get to wake up, alone and heartbroken.

Author's Note

PLease telll me what you think? I didn't edit this yet, I was kinda in a hurry, but hopefully I'll edit it soon. So, please tell me your honest opinion? Thanks for reading! <3

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

It seems heartfelt. I like the font.

[r]

Cliche? Who da heck cares?! Besides, it's good anyway, and you can always edit and add to make it better and more....idk. Complete? It seems like it's missing something, but has potential. I don't care what anyone else says, I ish like it. :)

Oh, and for a title? I like... "Sleepless Wishes" or "Sleepless Memories".

[Bella-Marie]

I dissagree with the chiche bit, and I loved the end three lines - very very moving. I like the title 'Heartbroken' for a title. Now I know it's cliche but... meh.

[KL]

My honest opinion is that this is reaaaaally cliche. I'm sorry. There's just nothing that original about it - it seems like something I've read a million times before concerning heartbreak and the longing of someone else. Keep tryin'!