The Girl Who'd Do Anything For You

Ehhh, I don't really like this. I wrote it kinda quick so yeah :/

I saw you the other day, out in town.

You were walking around,

A smile on your face.

But I’m the only other person who knows it’s fake.
I watched you try to laugh and have fun out with your friends.

But, I could tell you struggling.

I’m the one you confided in.

I’m the one who’s always there for you.

I’m always the one you pick second.

But why can’t I be first?
I love you more than you’ll ever know,

And more than those other girls can.

Why can’t you just see the signs?
I’ve tried and tried to make you see, but you’re blind to everything.

And, now as you walk away,

A fake smile plastered on your face,

My heart breaks a little bit more,

And I wonder if you’ll ever notice me.

The girl who’d do anything for you.

Author's Note

I wrote this kinda quick (like I said in the description) so i don't really like it. Please tell me what you think? And, is the title too long????? Thanks for reading :/

Reviews

[Patricia(:]

Even though you may have wrote it quickly, it's a lovely piece of work my dear. No it isn't long at all, it's perfect. I like how it seems to talk about both people in the poem, not only the girl. I also love how you put the emotion of heartbreak into the poem, specially at the end with the hint of italic on the 'The girl who'd do anything for you.' Magnificent poem(:

[NeverShoutAlex]

It's sweet, heart filled

[Kelly M.]

not everyone notices us in life, but we have to get up and clean our selves up. This poem is true and it was nice to read the story behind it. Some people do this in life and I like this because you didn't beat around the bush. You took a subject and ran right smack into it and then when you were finished had something VERY VERY beautiful.

[Jazique]

Awe why to some people do they be blind to love. No it wasn't too long, as long as it speaks what you are trying to say its fine.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we desire what we can't have. But time is our benefit. A good friend can be many things in a life. Some people learn to see the world around them with different eyes with time and age. I like the complete poem. A strong poem of a wish and great desire. Thank you.
Coyote

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I really enjoy this. Its my situation. Very good writing and the titles perfect.

[al25]

This is really amazing. I like everything about your poem. Like the your blind line it worked very well. Anyway enjoyed reading this.

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

very good poem, I like it ha ha

[Jonathan De Elvira]

wow,
this is cute...
not bad at all...
the paragraph is almost simple and honest imo...
I'm liking it...
I bet the guy would feel the same if he reads it...
like it alot bella..:)

[Jane Doe]

i likie:)
goo bella
:)
two thumbs up :Phahahhaha
-ajm/chika
100/100