I'm Falling

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I'd never fallen head over heals for someone.

I'd never even imagined that it was possible for me.

I'd been through so many break ups,

and broken hearts,

I didn't think I would ever find,

that one person,

worth dying for.

 

But I was wrong.

I knew,

the first time my heart skipped a beat,

when I saw you.

The first time,

our eyes met,

I felt something,

and I think you felt it, too.

I couldn't breathe,

the first time I saw you.

I knew,

the first time I started flirting,

that I was falling,

head over heels,

in love with you.

 

Author's Note

I kinda liked this one, but i'm not really sure about it. does it make sense?? Please tell me what you think. thanks! =D

Reviews

[Ryan]

I can definatly relate. This poem send a message to the reader, and it's felt in every word. Excellent job. Also I'd just like to say that although this isn't the case for most poems, a simple down to earth word choice works for this one, probably because the phrasing is so well done. Overall, I love it.

P.S. haha it's heels

[~Qu33n B~]

I love this!! It really kinda reminds me of me. I love it and it makes perfect sense! Great write!

[Sean Allen]

Your poem certainly does make sense and it looks like you fixed the capitalization that Nicole mentioned.

A long long time ago, someone, now long forgotten, told me to be wary of using the word 'I' in writing as well as speaking. Oh yes, it was a sales trainer at a seminar for an employer.

The focus of our communication should always be directed to another person... 'you, he, she, etc.'

[Jordan]

niceeeeeeeeeeee bells!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Hey it always happens when you least expect it and it don't take long to feel it... it is the greatest natural high you can ever feel... very sweetly written, simply straight from the heart. Love that kind of expression.

[Through the Gateway]

It's sweet and simple, but I don't feel the emotion. I want to *experience* you falling head-over-heels. Every ache in your chest, every caught breath, every tingle of skin, every agonizing moment when your eyes meet. Let me *know* you're falling in love.

[Nicole]

You might want to capitallize the I in the second sentence. That was the only mistake I found.
Great Job!
-- Nicole

[LisetteCanWrite!]

I liked this one personally.. the feeling of falling in love.. the emotions rang clear and true.. never thought you would find the one person worth dying for... love is such a rollercoaster ride.. but that initial process is just so many things from bliss to frustration.. but the passionate adventure is surely a thrill to many! This was captured very well I found.. thank you for sharing! =)

[Rachel]

the grammar at the begining kind of bugged me.