The world's most sought-after cliché

It takes over your senses

taking control of everything.

It changes everything about you.

The way you think, feel,

The way you perceive.

It brings out your best

It brings out your worst. 

It can make you feel like

you're on all the drugs in the world.

Like you're smoking 

anything that can be smoked

Like you're drinking

anything that intoxicates.

It can make you feel like

wanting to run away.

Wanting to not want it,

yet want it.

Wanting to not feel it,

yet feel it more.

If it's truly unconditional,

sanity is nothing but a memory.

If it's truly unconditional,

it's irrevocable.

Author's Note

It's pretty rough, but it's what I was feeling when I wrote it.
I welcome criticism, don't hesitate.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

I especially like the ending two lines... "If it's truly unconditional / it's irrevocable." That gives the poem a really powerful ending and a good tone. The rest of the poem could use a little work with the structure, especially "It can make you feel like / you're on all the drugs in the world." and the parts that follow that line (about drugs, of course). The wording was a little awkward for me. Also, the stanza with three lines instead of two, it doesn't necessarily disrupt the flow, but it does throw off the pattern slightly. Otherwise, it is a wonderful interpretation on this cliche (I wonder what it could be haha... being sarcastic, of course). I really enjoyed reading this. Well done.

[Sam Severn]

I've gotta say, Beedlethebard, I love, love, love this little poem!!! I love the simple n' spare n' stark n' naked way you've laid it out. N' I adore the GORGEOUS lines 'bout "It can make you feel like/you're on all the drugs in the world/Like you're smoking/anything that can be smoked".....WOW! Now that is some superior writing! GREAT WORK!! ㋡

[Brasso]

I've gotta say I'm not impressed on the whole, however I do like certain aspects, such as a sort of enjambment which could be used to represent the ongoing nature of what you have written about, which I think is excellent. I don't like the way that there appears to be no form to it, however, because this would probably be even better with a form that suited your poem (e.g. the poem 'Island Man' is set out to look like the surf in the portrait, but when put to landscape it resembles a city skyline, which shows the inner conflict with the 'Island man'. Overall, a good poem, with a nice structure, however work on creating a form (that's how the while poem looks on the page) for future poetry, since this will greatly increase the message that you are sending or the power behind what you write. Sorry for the long, rambly review by the way
Brasso

[Ardeth Lane]

I agree with the other two people. Very powerful words in the end there. GREAT job. It made me wonder what it was about, and yet at the same time it was like I already knew.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

The last two lines are powerful as Arra says, giving it more punch.
I am not enough of a writer to critique structure , meter flow ..
I like it wonderful title .. and poem.
Chloe