Pot Holes

On my way to work I know where all the pot holes are

I avoid them when I'm driving your car

Long lines,

Loud laughs,

When the sun beats down and you start to sweat

I know how to avoid all the things that make you

Agitated, angry, upset.

Reviews

[Mike Keenan]

Neat. Good metaphor and I see the need for a visual pot hole, BUT I would get rid of l3-4 and vary the lengths of the other lines to achieve the same result.

[rmarrwrites]

Love this!!! You put so much into this short poem, delightful to read.

[Just_a_teen_]

Great short piece of a poem it is!! Mind blowing friend!

[Green]

I think this is an analogy I haven't seen before, so that's always fun to stumble upon. Also, I can relate to the whole pot hole concept on the way to work. I've often thought about how much of an advantage it is to know where they all are so you can avoid them even when you can't see them (although it probably makes your driving look a little crazy).
Relationships are so complicated, though, and pot holes is such a good thing to use to describe them, especially the kind that seem so innocuous and then end up being worse than you thought. Avoiding them is definitely a skill.
I'm going to stop rambling now, but I think this was a good write. Thanks for sharing.

[Bee Oxford]

Hi thanks for the review! I definitely drive like a crazy person because I know all the potholes here in Portland haha. I appreciate the read and review!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is clever...I love the figurative use of Pot Holes to describe a relationship.

And I relate...we have so many damn pot holes here...the kind that are on a real road and do real damage to the car.

[Bee Oxford]

thank you!