Dear Dad

Dear Dad

A Poem by Miss Marie Riorden.
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I'm in such a depressed mood tonight

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Dear Dad,

I still love you despite what you've done

I guess I'm not like your darling son

I know I'm not like him, and never will I

I'm way too caring, I'm way too shy

I don't do drugs, I won't drink

And cigarettes, well I think they stink

I know this makes me different, I'm not the same

I don't care for money, attention, or fame

I just want love, is that too much to ask?

I keep asking myself why put up this mask

I know you don't care, not even in the least

I understand dad, you don't want me

And to tell you the truth, neither did mommy

You have your boy, he's your pride and joy

Bathed in the scent of marijuana, aren't you so proud?

His breath is baited with alcohol, and smoke is a shroud

He's part of the "in" crowd, you know, the idiots

Or in my opinion, the s****y ones

I know you know how mean he is to me

Yet you don't do anything, you act like you don't see

This pain I go through, I strive for your love

And of course I struggle, trying to make it above

My brother, who is so much more important I guess

Look daddy, I'm an emotional mess

Why won't you notice me? Look at your daughter

You never really thought I'd get anywhere, I'm just a girl

I won't be anything like my brother, that I promise you

Each word I'm speaking, you know, it's true

But I guess I'll shut up now, you don't need to hear this

I wish you could give me one last goodnight-kiss

Upon my cheek, full of love and glee

From your one and only daughter,

-Marie-

© 2011 Miss Marie Riorden.


Author's Note

Miss Marie Riorden.
I seem to always seem to sign with Marie. . .

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:( Wow. This is so sad. I hate to hear stories of when people's parents favor the other sibling(s), because I'd never want that to happen to anyone. Anyhow, aside from that, this is a really dark, sentimental poem that has a lot of strong points probably because there IS so much authentic emotion behind it. I love the part when you get sarcastic "aren't you so proud?" , because that's the part where it gets most intense for me. Awesome poem, really. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Incredibly touching piece..
That's really all I can say.
Emotion just pours out of the poem.
Amazing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your right, it is sad
and I to know this feeling all to well.
but it is a very nice write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I just read this in class with you. :D I loved it, you did a wonderful job. A great portrayl of those feelings of "not being good enough".

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Possibly you signed with Marie as a kind of subconscious symbolism to show the lack of caring by your parents that you prefer Marie or because it's your middle name the misunderstanding between you and your parents (I read your profile before reviewing as creep as that sounds :/)
The poem itself was heartbreaking, real emotion packed in the lines and you managed, for the most part, to keep a good rhyming scheme going. I hate hearing of things like this, but when your family fails, I guess you stand beside your friends!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow this just seemed to rip my heart out, the words are true for many people out there, that seem to be hidden behind the "greater" sibling, when really its the "lesser" one who has done all these great achievements or like you are just seeking to be loved, like most of us. This is a great poem! Keep it up! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sad, that word always sits uneasily with me, sad doesn't begin to cover the explosion of wonderful and terrible feeling that one feels from reading this piece, it laces the tongue and the readers mind with sooting ache and revealed temperance, bright painful and raw, fantastic!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so sad. Its sad that your dad favors your brother because he is in "the in crowd." You captured all these sad and hurtful feelings so beautifully.
♥ Ta'Shandra

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

:( Wow. This is so sad. I hate to hear stories of when people's parents favor the other sibling(s), because I'd never want that to happen to anyone. Anyhow, aside from that, this is a really dark, sentimental poem that has a lot of strong points probably because there IS so much authentic emotion behind it. I love the part when you get sarcastic "aren't you so proud?" , because that's the part where it gets most intense for me. Awesome poem, really. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow, such passion. You captured a lot of emotions there, chick.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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