Heart's Defier

She'll seem so nice for just a while, then she'll turn into something wrong and wild.

Her smile is as sweet as honey

Her gaze a calm serenity

She's one who mends calamity

And keeps the soul light and free

 

Her beauty is marked upon her face

No other could ever take her place

Honesty is just another beautiful mistake

And she will be your saving grace

 

She draws you in so slowly

And tempts you with a kind word

She's telling you the truth, at least you think

All her lies are unheard

 

She's dangerous and sweet

A contradiction in humanity

Making you believe on thing, one lie

But looks are just her blasphemy

 

And always, you fall for it

It's just another mischevous trap

She's just the same as all the others

Only lost without a map

 

A convincing liar she is

But sweet as candy, the liar

She'll use you, she'll break you

She's called the Heart's Defier

Author's Note

Doesn't exacly sound right, but I could use some criticism.

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

well my darling we all could use some criticism but with one such as yourself, one rarely gets the opportunity. I get the message of the piece and ord knows I and many other readers will be able to relate, but I feel that you almost out it all out there to much. Theres no secrecy or attempt to cover up even the small parts of this girls self allusion of superiorty in mind and intelligence. I sense that, and maybe it's the point, but your character reference in this prose lends itself to the "cry for help club", which in itself is bracing and all that that entails. However as a strong poet I feel you can hide the simplistic and all readers will undoubtly try and sole the mystery - just a thought, well done, good read.