Heart

Stop--

            --hear

                         --listen.

It needs to be s i l e n t

   in order to hear your own heart beat

            beat

            beat

                ...Is it still there -

                      fluttering like that butterfly

                      on your hip long ago?

Sometimes wonder penetrates

and little eyes

            stare.

The past

         is not so easily forgotten,

         not when that passion

                          that feeling

               still exists

      still consumes

still posesses.

 

Try to forget.

Attempt silent indifference.

 

              Do you remember?

Reviews

[JBoone]

This is well done. Beautifuly written and super creative. Great imagery.

[maxin james]

Hmmmm .. nice one!!! that too from a member of pagan writers!! ;)
I liked the lines- i t needs to be s i l e n t

in order to hear your own heart beat.

Still I can criticise you hard:
Lack of free flow! More focus on mechanical swift movement rather than expressing it through mastery of style and words!!!

Atlast good words:
You really have power and ability to write well and deeper! You sounds deep, if you focus and read more good works then sure you will be more wonderful...