Stiletto

Octain ~ a form devised by Luke Prater (http://lukepraterswordsalad.com)

Cutting first midsummer lust I
filched him. Seduced by plectrum slide
I let long friendship come untied.

Stiletto seventeen: wild rye
to sow tonight, not yet contrite,
patchouli-fuelled rules apply

for crimson glow, a batt’ring tide.
Cutting first midsummer lust. Aye.

Author's Note

Octain: Eight lines as two tercets and a couplet, eight syllables per line with the first line repeated (as much as possible) as the last. Meter is iambic or trochaic tetrameter, but fine to just count eight syllables per line for those who prefer that. Rhyme scheme – A-b-b a-c/c-a b-A

(A = repeated refrain line. c/c refers to line five having midline (internal) rhyme (eg. here/sneer), which is different to the a- and b-rhymes)

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

Pretty wonderful. Elizabeth Taylor yes... your words do her picture justice.

Antonio xx

[L]

aye. Last line is such a cracker. Your word-use as ever is precise and razor-sharp Becky

[Chris]

In truth I didn't pay the least attention to any format whatsoever. The flow of your thoughts and the 'bit' of life they encapsulated held me lightly. When a lady speaks and her soul peeks around the corner of her being - well, she was lovely and her eyes just danced... ya know?

Chris