oh Beccy...i had to smile when i read this....i certainly relate to what you have said here...
i have this crazy habit (and just keep this between you and me) of bumping into furniture and saying "excuse me"---
or dropping a utensil on the floor in the kitchen and saying "sorry"---
i guess i live in Tolkien's world where everything is alive....everything.
Such a clever piece.
j.
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You're not alone jacob. I have actually caught myself apologising to the contents of a kitchen cupbo.. read moreYou're not alone jacob. I have actually caught myself apologising to the contents of a kitchen cupboard, as I close the door and shut out what little light they were enjoying. :))
I love the thoughts you share here, nicely conversational, not a bit preachy, but more like opening the window and letting in some light on the possibilities. Your light shines a long ways . . . from the sharply detailed inanimate examples to the more deeply complex discussion of how everything absorbs vibes from everything else. This brings to mind how little we know-it-all humans actually know about how energy and information are exchanged! By the way, I love your contribution to the annual collaboration (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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Thanks Margie. I'm really looking forward to 2020 at the cafe, should be really good.
.. read moreThanks Margie. I'm really looking forward to 2020 at the cafe, should be really good.
Charlie and I are at mum and dad's tomorrow night, a family and friends party and I expect we'll be staying over.
Have a good New Year celeb yourself and trust you and yours are well.
wow! i love this write. it made me remember how when i was a boy i would pick up a stick and that stick could become anything i wanted. your words wax deep and telling - very relatable. the last two stanzas especially powerful to me, reminiscent of my muse Thoreau. bravo ... :)
Profound, powerful, absolutely stunning!! You have some questionable linebreak in Stanzas 2 and 3 (that you should look into, as they do more harm to the piece than good), but the musicality, the message, the progression, the sheer PO-E-TRY!!! Astounding!! That last stanza is killer and is in all honesty poetry in motion right down to its cathartic finale. Well freaking done!!
You must have an intrinsic sea of words and thoughts and ideas that you can effortlessly dip into. A poets mind, a literary brain that absorbs all corners. A gift of observation, seeing a world from a different point of view.
I have much to learn, but I so enjoy the learning, reading works like this. Thank you Beccy.
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Thank you Marie-Louise for your lovely comment. Not sure myself sometimes, how a poem is birthed. I .. read moreThank you Marie-Louise for your lovely comment. Not sure myself sometimes, how a poem is birthed. I simply love thinking and dreaming about things, then capturing them as best I can on paper.
Beccy. You bring everything alive with this wonderful poem, and as jacob observed, it is such a clever piece. I especially enjoyed the reference to children talking to Teddy Bears and making magic in their own little make believe world, a world that may well be closer to the truth than our perceived adult reality.
Whoops, gotta go, damn car won't start and I'm late already. :)
T
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That's the thing with children T, theirs IS the real world. As for your car, just go and ask nicely,.. read moreThat's the thing with children T, theirs IS the real world. As for your car, just go and ask nicely, it works wonders. :))
Much of this seems to be seen through the eyes of a child--simplistic but highly imaginative. How marvelous that they (we) can behold a world of delight, void of things like war and crooked politicians.
Wonderful words and thoughts shared dear Beccy,
"Prometheus steals fire from
the heavens, and this time,
animates everything."
The above lines are true. If we allow, the fire can be smothered. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
I tend to find myself bawling abuse at both Alexa and Siri. I also have heated, one way, arguments with the sat nav lady, who seems to think it funny to give me instructions to change direction AFTER junctions passed.
Good morning, hope you are both well.
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Alexa and Siri and the Sat Nav lady should only be used by those under 21. I leave all that sort of .. read moreAlexa and Siri and the Sat Nav lady should only be used by those under 21. I leave all that sort of thing to Charlie,same as he leaves me to pick up after him. :))
All well here, and seasons greetings to your and yours.
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Thank you. Hope you have a great Christmas and New year
I think the same thing of different objects I talk to appliances especially when they go on the blink..like the toster burning my toast and. I can understand the was machine singing its song with a certain rhythm
although plants are living I do notice they do flourish more if you talk to them and I do..the thing I like most here is the magic of children personifying. Objects with their wonderful imagination .it is such a loveliness to behold
Whatever however big or small makes us FEEL makes us more human surely. Our surroundings mirror our needs and the paths we walk, run or adventure along. Once seen they become part of life's experience, no matter inanimate, surely.
You have a way of opening giant, solid wooden doors and inviting people into a world of utter awareness. Always have and will... you are so much appreciated and admired. Nuff said.
I'm forty four, single and have a lovely fifteen year old son called Charlie. I've been writing poetry and short stories since I can remember. I have always been an assiduous reader of poetry and real.. more..