Children, raised by war, taken by war

 

Dazzling
is the sound of tears
falling to the bottom of a copper jug


Dazzling
are the crimson scars
staining rosy cheeks with blood


Dazzling
are children's memories
shaken by war's heavy breeze


Falling
out of their youthful minds
forgotten like old autumn's leaves


Denial
is a soothing lie
followed by the painful grief


Knowing
that a little soul has died
and yet the universe is still at ease
yet our universe is still going with ease

Author's Note

i have exams, sorry i'm lazy with reading, and i had a bit of a writer's block so if i read your works gus i'd have been affected and impulsively would have written something similar to your ideas, to me it'd feel like steeling, but then some children died.
so this is dedicated to all of the children who are affected with wars all over the world.
Sal.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Please don't worry about returning the favor, as far as reading other writers on this website. What you contribute here in writing is a gift & there's nothing you need to do more than that. Your truth is so educational for the rest of us, we are the ones wishing we could do more. This poem is so amazing becuz it presents a point of view that most people never know or need to ponder. We've been seeing many bad pictures of dying Syrian children lately, so your words fill out the understanding behind the pictures. I've never felt so worthless in my life as I do now, with the world being in such a mess, but with Syria experiencing the worst of the worst. I'm very sorry for the way things are going there. Your situation helps me deal with my own bad life situation & I apologize for this selfish point of view (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Salar Majak]

Thank you, it's not selfish! everybody has their own struggles, and just because some are harder it doesn't mean that the others' are any less important. Please don't feel worthless! Thank you for caring! that is very important
i hope you have a wonderful day!

[barleygirl]

I've been thinking about you becuz we are getting ready to bomb Syria right now. I hate the way several bully countries are all using your country as a place to fight it out! I hope you stay safe (((HUGS)))

[LadySoDivine]

This is quite a wonderful poem. Too many children were brought up in the time of war, death and loss, but most of the world still doesn't seem to care. It's devastating that countries still believe that war is the answer to their problems and make us praise the soldiers and warriors that take part in it. Why would we praise people that only hurt and murder other people and only work as the governments weapons? It's sad how children who were born in those circumstances were forced to grow up so fast. None of them even had a childhood. Great job, Sal!

[Salar Majak]

i know what you mean :( sadly, thanks a lot though for reading :)

[emmajoy]

It's people like you who highlight what's happening and keep the awareness going. There's little else 'ordinary' folk can do than speak out and in such a sadly magnificent way. Sal. In fact one becomes anything but ordinary when feeling so deeply. It's a terrible situation, an evil one, children should live in a loving, gentle and fun atmosphere, not hell. Thank you so much for, ' .. yet our universe is still going with ease' - your irony should be writ in giant letters, dear friend.

[Salar Majak]

:) i shall write it in giant letters :) thanks Emma, you are so very supportive

[Richard Man]

Sal, in a crisis, you can only do five things.... stick your head in the sand and hope it will go away.... freeze...like a rabbit in car's headlights.... run away....fight.... or stand and observe... change... what you can....and if you can't... tell others and then help.
Your exams will lead to your future.... and Inshallah... and to the future of others. Good luck.

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot Mr. Ritchard, my exams are going fine :) three kids were shot in the head though :/ so i really don't know if my destiney will be like that, but i'm optimistic, yup they will lead to my future, an believe me, right now i do feel like a rabbit

[Nia Hope]

This is really good I like this

[Salar Majak]

thanks :)

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Very Good work. Pen On. Do u read mine to Time, Anguish and Why?

[Frieda P]

Did you mean dazzling as 'glaring'....I felt this one, there's no light here, just sadness, lovely work Sal.

[Salar Majak]

Yup exactly!!! Thanks!!!!

[bluessadmood]

i dont think a lot would really care dear,even if lots more young ones are dead
i ve followed the tragedy,it really brings tears,what brutality ,all this killing
and sounds like all are mute or deaf,whats happening to this world
i will never know,really i am surprised,to all that i see everyday
so many other disasters happened,but i never witnessed
anything like i see today..i wonder really how you can take all this
sad lovely write..

[Salar Majak]

thank you for reading, one day, all will end, war WILL end :) i'm sure of it

[Felicity's Eve]

This is so heartbreaking and written sooo well! You have a great insight and compassion that really shows in your award-winning writing :)

100/100

[Salar Majak]

award winning??
thanks so much :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:D

[Traci]

Another great write, Sal. I would say one of your best to date. This was heartbreaking, as you captured the emotions one lives with wonderfully. This poem really made me take a look at my own life, how I complain and take so much for granted. And yet there are people in other countries who would do anything to escape their lives and be in my situation. I can't even begin to imagine living in a war zone, the fear adults and children feel every day of their lives. Can you really say they "live" as it seems they only "exist". This situation is hard enough for adults to comprehend but innocent children should never be subject to that environment, and certainly not die in war zone.

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot for this amazing review, and yes, they do ''live'' they do not just exist, they laugh and cry and have fun while always keeping an eye on bombs and explotions, believe me, i know, i'm in the center of Syria for my exams, :) they live, it's harder, but they do :)

[kumars]

good poem.

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot

[xxlheart]

i can't imagine....and won't try. your poem is gripping and written in a way that shows us that everyday life can be completely different for some. i think your use of dazzling shows that. you are an incredible writer

[Salar Majak]

wow! hehe thanks, this is beautiful!