Children, raised by war, taken by war

 

Dazzling
is the sound of tears
falling to the bottom of a copper jug


Dazzling
are the crimson scars
staining rosy cheeks with blood


Dazzling
are children's memories
shaken by war's heavy breeze


Falling
out of their youthful minds
forgotten like old autumn's leaves


Denial
is a soothing lie
followed by the painful grief


Knowing
that a little soul has died
and yet the universe is still at ease
yet our universe is still going with ease

Author's Note

i have exams, sorry i'm lazy with reading, and i had a bit of a writer's block so if i read your works gus i'd have been affected and impulsively would have written something similar to your ideas, to me it'd feel like steeling, but then some children died.
so this is dedicated to all of the children who are affected with wars all over the world.
Sal.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Please don't worry about returning the favor, as far as reading other writers on this website. What you contribute here in writing is a gift & there's nothing you need to do more than that. Your truth is so educational for the rest of us, we are the ones wishing we could do more. This poem is so amazing becuz it presents a point of view that most people never know or need to ponder. We've been seeing many bad pictures of dying Syrian children lately, so your words fill out the understanding behind the pictures. I've never felt so worthless in my life as I do now, with the world being in such a mess, but with Syria experiencing the worst of the worst. I'm very sorry for the way things are going there. Your situation helps me deal with my own bad life situation & I apologize for this selfish point of view (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Salar Majak]

Thank you, it's not selfish! everybody has their own struggles, and just because some are harder it doesn't mean that the others' are any less important. Please don't feel worthless! Thank you for caring! that is very important
i hope you have a wonderful day!

[barleygirl]

I've been thinking about you becuz we are getting ready to bomb Syria right now. I hate the way several bully countries are all using your country as a place to fight it out! I hope you stay safe (((HUGS)))

[Daniel Eckert]

I have been away from writerscafe for awhile now but poems like these are what draw me back. Absolutely amazing.

[Salar Majak]

:) I'm glad you are back
and glad you injoied it

[Jack...]

This was sad and heartbreaking. To imagine the little children crying, pleading for someone to keep them safe and no one listens or cares. What must be going through their little minds. Yes the world is at ease, in an evil sort of way. Very well done my friend.

[Salar Majak]

thanks Mr.Jack, i know what you mean

[pasdepoisson]

Is indifference the cruelest emotion? Is the universe indeed unmoved by the death of an innocent? Hamlet says that "there is a certain providence in the fall of a sparrow"- but at times this seems belied.

[Salar Majak]

only at times my freind, only at sometmes there is a certain providence in the fall of a sparrow, depends on how famous this sparrow is in our days ;)

[Zahra]

beautiful write Aurora, war not only alters children's lives but of many next generations to come. This is a really though provoking piece, excellent.

[Salar Majak]

thank you

[Sirius King]

Powerful Write!

[Salar Majak]

thanks

[simplyme]

So good and so close to how such kids feel ...wow work...

[Salar Majak]

thank you :)

[Tim Piotrowicz]

I personally think there will always be war on this earth, but we may not always have to stay on this planet. This poem speaks to me of the child's perspective of war and I really love that kind of thing because of its familiarity to me. Children are strangely resilient creatures, but war tears down people without respect of persons. Keep writing stuff like this.

[Salar Majak]

i shall keep writing when the muse hovers over me of coures XD
thanks

[Izabe143]

This sounds like the way the children of military family's feel upset and dead to the world with their fathers off at war.

[Salar Majak]

i know right
it's sad
thanks

[Izabe143]

My father is in the military so I know how it feels

[Izabe143]

My father is in the military so I know how it feels

[Jack V.]

Good job capturing an emotion.

[Salar Majak]

thank you :) glad you felt it

[Danielle]

This is beautiful, and all too real.
There are so many children dying due to war-related crises, but their cries
go unheard. Well written!

[Salar Majak]

you are right
thanks