Children, raised by war, taken by war

 

Dazzling
is the sound of tears
falling to the bottom of a copper jug


Dazzling
are the crimson scars
staining rosy cheeks with blood


Dazzling
are children's memories
shaken by war's heavy breeze


Falling
out of their youthful minds
forgotten like old autumn's leaves


Denial
is a soothing lie
followed by the painful grief


Knowing
that a little soul has died
and yet the universe is still at ease
yet our universe is still going with ease

Author's Note

i have exams, sorry i'm lazy with reading, and i had a bit of a writer's block so if i read your works gus i'd have been affected and impulsively would have written something similar to your ideas, to me it'd feel like steeling, but then some children died.
so this is dedicated to all of the children who are affected with wars all over the world.
Sal.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Please don't worry about returning the favor, as far as reading other writers on this website. What you contribute here in writing is a gift & there's nothing you need to do more than that. Your truth is so educational for the rest of us, we are the ones wishing we could do more. This poem is so amazing becuz it presents a point of view that most people never know or need to ponder. We've been seeing many bad pictures of dying Syrian children lately, so your words fill out the understanding behind the pictures. I've never felt so worthless in my life as I do now, with the world being in such a mess, but with Syria experiencing the worst of the worst. I'm very sorry for the way things are going there. Your situation helps me deal with my own bad life situation & I apologize for this selfish point of view (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Salar Majak]

Thank you, it's not selfish! everybody has their own struggles, and just because some are harder it doesn't mean that the others' are any less important. Please don't feel worthless! Thank you for caring! that is very important
i hope you have a wonderful day!

[barleygirl]

I've been thinking about you becuz we are getting ready to bomb Syria right now. I hate the way several bully countries are all using your country as a place to fight it out! I hope you stay safe (((HUGS)))

[Bibhuti Bhusan Rath]

A beautifully crafted peace of art that made a strong impact in my heart....Thanks Aurora for sharing these feelings...

[Eric Pudalov]

Aurora, this is extremely powerful and touching (and that's not just lip service)! I think it's easy to forget, when I live somewhere like the U.S., that there are people in other parts of the world that suffer daily from starvation and war.

I've seen some of it in places like Israel, and it was definitely a wake up call! The line "the universe is at ease" made me think quite a bit. I'm not sure what it means in ultimate reality when someone (including a child) dies. Perhaps there is more to it than we perceive!

Your poem has so much depth and beauty to it, that it deserves a 2nd, 3rd reading to decipher it all!

[ashesonfire]

Aw! A very wonderful poem, Sal. very sad, and you did a very good job showing that through the writing, very touching!

[Salar Majak]

thank you a lot

[Stanley Wilson]

can only have been written from experience. Out of the dark and evil of conflict rose a beautiful piece of work. A great tribute to children in conflict. Powerful very cleverly written from the heart. Thank you for sharing this touching work.

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot for your words

[Onku Ghosh]

A very touching poem wrtten beautifully!!

[Salar Majak]

thank you! i'm glad you enjoyed it

[Pragya Saxena]

True indeed whatever happens...the world still goes on..
fabulous work! :)

[Salar Majak]

yup it does, thank you! i'm glad you enjoyed it

[AdorableDreams]

Woooow! Speechless! You are GREAT!

[Salar Majak]

thanks i'm humbled XD

[MOON]

True the world goes about their business , while others are dying in agony. It's happening right in front of us in real time so to speak scary!

[Salar Majak]

it is scary isn't it?
makes you feel disgusted by the world

[MOON]

Indeed we learn nothing from the past and we doomed to repeat it. Most people just give lip service to peace, in the end just empty words !

[Salar Majak]

lip service hu? i think i know what you are talking about, it's painful

[An owl on the moon]

How your words made me ache... so deeply... precious, young lives lost forever... And you made me ponder how hard to find the fragrance of peace when you grow up only ever smelling the stench of war. Thank you for sharing your heart and helping us long for a world of peace.

[Salar Majak]

:)
thank you for the support, your words make me smile