Are the dead really dead?

Lie in your bed tonight,
close your heavy eyes,
burdened by the day.

think about your life
before into your purple dreams,
your mind drifts away..

what if you're not alive?
what if that from the start,
you were lying in a grave..

within the empty ground,
mistaken for a dead,
lying wide awake..

would it freak you out,
to hear their sad sobs?
to hear them for you pray?

is it hard for you to lie,
buried in that hall,
and for your end to wait?

think about who died,
the ones you loved the most,
what if they feel the same?

what if it's all a lie,
that you only stay alone,
until forever ends?

slowly open your eyes,
try to cherish your life,
for you are not dead yet..

Author's Note

i thought about this yesterday, and it freaked the hell out of me
i mean seriously what if death is only a continual observation of other people's life?
do i sound creepy?? :S

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

@de-mruf: Why use a quote from Wikipedia? It's the very definition of plagiarism for ANY site and to use it in a comment for a most beautiful poet this site has..... I have words for that, that I don't wish to use!!

This poem is fascinating on many levels, assumed and gorgeous!! To take a step back and wonder the creation that is the "birth of what we believe" and apply that to what we can hold physically, must boggle the mind on a consistent basis and rarely isi it ever written so beautifully with the respect and adoration of such care to words that you show in this very poem. Just beautiful.... I'm coming off of another one of your poems, so I'm with a most lofty mood to approach this one!! lol You brought up so many fascinating ares of dreams, wonders that Science tries to prove and disprove, and what if this regeneration that we feel in being connected all at once and to everyone is, in fact, energy passed from one to another through the course of our world's history on Earth?!!!! Beautiful poem. Wonderful length, word usage, strength in pushing such a topic so easily, and gorgeous poetess!! Great job.... I Love You, Aurora.... I miss your poems... even when they are sometimes read on a daily basis!! lol


xoxoxo -Your Mark

[Salar Majak]

MARK!!!!!! YOU'RE HERE!!
i love you for the words you said, they really comfort me and make be blush like a tomato, my poems are read by a daily basis by you, that is honoring, but it's a shame i can't enjoy your poems, because they are not there anymore, even that beautiful rose poem that you left, isn't there anymore,
thank you dear Mark for these beautiful words of yours, that always fascinate me
love you dear friend
xoxoxo- Aurora

[Nick.B]

Reminded me of the aerosmith's songs "living on the edge," someone we have to focus on the present because tomorrow who knows? anyway gerat job

[Salar Majak]

:) thanks, and i HAVE to hear that song XD

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

Very poignant write. I had to re-read it a couple of times to let the weight of it completely anchor for as mortal our first response a lot of times is to deny this very idea of ending, of finality even though it is inevitable. I don't find it horrifying or creepy to think on this. If anything I like how in a way you embrace it... embrace the life and the fact that there is the possibility that not everything is as it seems... Accepting the unknown I suppose...

Good write
Very thought provoking poem...

LW

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot!
yeah i kind of embrace it in a way XD, still wonder though.

[pasdepoisson]

The most horrifying aspect of this concept in some ways is that you'd be forced to watch your loved one's poor decision-making. It'd be like an eternal reality TV show.

Anyway, good job. I like the three line stanzas and compact statements- allows the reader room for thought.

[Salar Majak]

thank you
and it is creepy isn't it?

[pasdepoisson]

Sure is creepy! Like being buried alive for eternity...

[Jack...]

This was extremely thought provoking and to be honest, I have thought something similar in the past. very nicely written.

[Salar Majak]

thank you!
i think that everyone had their share of this thinking right? XD

[Wolfwind]

Certainly not creepy! Since it's really impossible to know what lies afterwords, I find it's best to ponder all possibilities. I personally like the idea that our human forms are alot like ovens and were are just incubating our souls and spirits until we've learned enough to transcend into the next level of existance, whatever that might be.

Ink that makes you think! The best kind! =)

Aaron

[Salar Majak]

wow! thank you Aaron!
i missed your amazing reviews!
and your amazing poems too!
thanks a lot
and bodies are ovens! hmmm nice idea to ponder on

[Balkaran Sidhu]

ur ryt perhaps...liked the poem..loved the last few lines..

[Salar Majak]

thank you a lot!!

[Zahra]

not creepy. Death and life two faces of the same coin. Very nice write

[Salar Majak]

nicely said, thanks!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Good to understand there is a alternate place to be. With life. Always chance to find happiness. In death we are done. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Salar Majak]

wow! thanks a lot! :)
in death we are done... it's sad, isn't it

[Zoya Sahai]

You don't sound creepy at all. You have thought about it in great depth and though it is scary, you've put it just right. very well expressed.

[Salar Majak]

thank you a lot!!

[Craig2591]

A very sobering thought. This poem seems well written with good flow.

[Salar Majak]

thank you!