A rainy day

this is something i wrote when i was 8 years old :P

I wonder why
the sun wouldn't come out today.

is it something i did?
did i make her angry yesterday?

did the moon break her heart?
did her threaten to go away?

or did the clouds imprison her
to keep her from stopping the rain..

My football is waiting
dying to go out and play

but mom said: ''No''
you'll catch a cold then in bed lay

i looked at the sun
and to God begged and prayed

that tomorrow the sun will shine
and drive the night away

then went to my room
and to have fun i tried to find a way

so i wrote a sad poem
about this rainy day.

Author's Note

this is something i wrote when i was eight, i found it the other day in a toy box i used to keep, i added somethings to it but didn't want to break the innocence of an eight years old memory, so don't judge the weak phrases
enjoy.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

This was adorably, sweet, Aurora!! Doesn't seem like much separates the world's children, but the borders and governments that keep them as so..... I wrote a poem when I was 11 and looking back on it, I read what sounded very very serious in text. What ELSE I remember is, that the days that I wrote it... I was happy, still playing with He-Man dolls, pouring my KoolAid, and burping the alphabet, too. lol I feel like I miss you so much when I read you in ANY poem, and I have never even had the luxury of being able to accompany your view in front of you. "did the moon break her heart?" ....that was gorgeous or seen as someone who would have been carrying the age of 10 to see such things so intentionally, and with a humble heart to remove all that chaos that adults and anger disguise in the later years!! Beautiful, Aurora!! *Big Hugzz* I hate that little rating thing at the bottom. I would never rate anything below a 100 for you... wouldn't make sense to me at all!! One of my purest joys in reading poetry that steals away with me in ANY mood and connects with me, always. : )



xoxoxoxoxo -Your Mark

[Salar Majak]

hehehe
you read that XD, i didn't want to post it but then said iwill, never was to sure of this one, i don't know why
you wrote a poem when you were eleven!! i want to read it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i guess it makes the poem more special :)
don't rate!!! i always hate rating, it's overrated. XD
thank you my dear Mark
xoxoooxoxoxxx XD-
Aurora

[Annabelle Lee]

This was exceptional for an eight year old. Wow, great!

[Salar Majak]

hehe i altered it a bit, thanks!

[Zoya Sahai]

You've always been a very talented writer I can see now.. :) very well written..

[Salar Majak]

:) thanks!

[pasdepoisson]

Quite impressive for a child author- are you planning on it for your "juvenile verses" book when you win the Nobel in literature?

[Salar Majak]

LOL
you just made me laugh so hard, me Nobel???
oh well we can only hope!
thanks sooooo much!

[larryb]

Very good poem ...you were very talented even at that young age :)

[Salar Majak]

thanks!
i altered it a bit though

[Nick.B]

Good write, doesn't look like a eight year old poem...great job

[Salar Majak]

well i altered it a bit :P
thanks

[quinfinn]

actually, this is quite a strong write. and for an eight year old to produce this type of art is amazing. it isn't easy to write about weather and not sound contrived. this is natural and pure and from the heart. i love it!

[Salar Majak]

awww thank you soooo much!!!!

[quinfinn]

you are welcome

[Chidoriflower]

How sweet and sad...I love it!

[Salar Majak]

thank you!

[Ashly Christen]

this is so cute and the fact you wrote this at 8 even cuter!!! keep this for life, you should submit it for a kids book or poetry book :)

[Salar Majak]

:3 really??? you think so??
you just made my day!! :D

[Ashly Christen]

i really do :D
happy to make u smile

[Salar Majak]

:)

[Craig2591]

Expresses the frustration of a child that just wants to play. Very good.

[Salar Majak]

hehe that is what i wanted, thanks!

[Devanshu Rajput]

a very great poem by a child's viewpoint.....i too become sad on a rainy day.....wonderful read..... thanks for sharing.....

[Salar Majak]

:) thanks for reading ,i'm glad you like it