the last minute

it's about what you feel when people bring you down

Empty eyes, looking right through me

every hidden secret to unfold.

"there is nothing left of you''

they whisper in my head

'give yourself to immortal sleep,

live the last seconds

say the last goodbye''

 

 

Now the scars are open wide

blood swallows every land

drowning within my own pain

i struggle just to stay around

 

 

but their icy hands chain me tight

they all keep pulling, pulling me down

both the angels and the devils

no one stayed to save me now

 

 

thus i shout with all my might

i'm not done of being alive

to see the sun for one more moment

the graceful rays across the sky

to feel the warmth on my cold skin

and with my eyes behold the light

both the angels and the devils

stand and watch me reach the ground

laying lifeless in the bottom

as the world dissolves to ash.

 

Author's Note

when the words keep bringing you down, just look up, because only the ripe tree gets thrown with rocks.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I come from a bloody land with its own civil war too. I dreamed of a land where we all sleep in peace and harmony without hate or intolerance towards each other where the Eagles fly to their summits and the fish swim to their destiny... Amoving peace since I lived in Lebanon's civil war and felt the pain and suffering of all ...:)

[Salar Majak]

i know how you feel, i'm living it, the war of Syria, although i'm in Turkey right now, my heart aches every single moment of every single day, and my eyes never get to dry, peace? what is that? i'm not able to tell any more.
thanks a lot for reading :) i'm glad you like it
i'm sorry you had to go through the Lebanon war, i was too young to realize it back then, but now, i just can say that i feel your pain :)

[Sami Khalil]

It shaped who I'm with my lost childhood . I feel what you are going through and I pray for a peaceful solution to all...Thank you too fro feeling my pain...:)

[Salar Majak]

:) always, thanks a lot i hope there will be a solution but my Syria is dead already, pain is something we've become professionals with XD
lost childhood, it just hurts.

[Sami Khalil]

Yes . It does. That is why poetry is my medecine...:)

[Ohhhwillow]

This is extremely descriptive, your use of immediate paradox is great, from one contrasting image to the next, very lovely Aurora

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot!! i'm glad you like it!!!

[Annabelle Lee]

this was amazing. very soft and whispery. and your picture is amazing, too! How pretty!

[Salar Majak]

hehehe!thank you a lot!!!

[Richard Man]

Your writing has undergone a quantum leap....Your use of words and imagery have blossomed. This is a very sensitive piece of writing. Thank you.... Aurora.... Sal....

[Salar Majak]

thank you so very much!! i'm really glad you like it, this means the world to me XD

[Coyote Poetry]

"Now the scars are open wide
blood swallows every land
drowning within my own pain
i struggle just to stay around"
I like the description and the struggle in the poem. Sometime we fall and can't escape. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot! i'm really glad you like it

[ashesonfire]

I love how touching this is! The imagery is very nice! :D

[Salar Majak]

thank you :3

[quinfinn]

i love the way you have encompassed these energies and feelings within this poignant write. very nicely done!

[Salar Majak]

thanks!! :D

[Dr. Wood ?]

very touching and also quite stark in its delivery..Pretty damn good too

[Salar Majak]

:3 thanks alot :D