an unanswered question

don't even havan idea where this came from

Oh fearless mountain!

ever so silently standing still.

Will to my heart one day,

your untold secrets spill?

Am i to enjoy the beautiful dream,

of flowing with river's water,that so gently streams,

and let my soul forever yell: ''free! I AM FREE!''?

Reviews

[Night]

...In Chinese tradition it is told of the fish that travels up the yellow river against the current...leaping up through the rapids, until it reaches The River Gate, where it continues up into the clouds transforming into a dragon...completing it's spiritual journey in life....free at last. Great write my friend.:)

[Salar Majak]

great story :), thanks alot, i'm glad you like the write

[Night]

...you're very welcome...:)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

its a nice write

[Salar Majak]

thanks!!

[quinfinn]

this is really good, i like the scene you painted with your words. high marks for this one!

[Salar Majak]

thanks :D

[sirenribbon@thehptshirt..]

Overall this feels very confident. I personally think you cant go wrong with mountains, rivers, and freedom!! Cheers

[Salar Majak]

:) thanks!!

[Felicity's Eve]

The last line is my favorite, but I love, love, love this overall as well. It really makes you think...

Amazing work!!! :)

[Salar Majak]

:) thanks alot!

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Nick.B]

It flows very well, also I like the message and the composition when talking to nature stating that my soul is free like the wind...great job

[Salar Majak]

thanks alottt i'm glad you like it

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Yes ...so many possible meanings and connotations that can be derived and formulated from y6our 7 line wonder.
The last line is of course striking the chord which we all share..."Are we really free?!"
Thank you Aurora

[Salar Majak]

thanks im glad you like it

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

i did

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Thank you for submitting your valuable entry for the 7 line poem contest!
We wish you all the best!

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is exquisite, a gently flowing dream into freedom. Lovely poem.

[Salar Majak]

thanks ! im glad you like it!

[Sid]

Nice write, it's got a lot hope in it, free as the mountain stream, quite the thought. Well I guess we all yearn to be free in our own way (not a clue what it means to be really free, kind of "know when I get there" situation) and we might even get there some day who knows? great write as you can see it got me thinking and sorry for blabbing...great write, enjoyed it!

[Salar Majak]

thanks, and no no no you weren't babling at all! I know what you mean and am glad you get it

[Richard Man]

I like the comparison of the solid unshakeable unflinching mountain.... with the thought that hidden are feelings and emotions which will gush and flow ... a refresh. Be strong and all will be OK. This has a lot of hope.

[Salar Majak]

:) yup!!!!!!!!! thank you so much!

[being me]

Am i to enjoy the beautiful dream,
of flowing with river's water,that so gently streams,
exquisite

[Salar Majak]

thnaks ;D