the silent noise

Have you ever felt so alone?
that although you are surrounded with people
you still feel the cold,
the emptiness of your troubled soul...

I lie back, on the sweet wet grass
listening....
listening...
to the misery of
the simply complicated silence sound

 

i hear it everywhere
hidden within the noise, i hear it!
in the depth of the loud world...
through the roars of the sea waves
crashing at the feat
of the abandoned shore....

i hear it in my soul
in the sadness of misery
i hear the silence that flows
overwhelming my darkened heart
draining it from rays of hope.

and although surrounded with people
i still feel so alone.

Author's Note

don't ask

Reviews

[Courtney]

This is great portrayal of all an emotion that is felt by so many people. It gives a voice to the disembodied being.. Although we know the feeling to be falsified and we are never truly alone, it does not cease to calm the roaring sounds of silence.. Well done :)

[Salar Majak]

thanks, i love it when the reveiw tuns out to be better than the actual poem :) thanks a lot

[being me]

its really touching...like u can really feel the silence that loneliness spreads..loved it aurora...lonely..in a crowd..i've gone through it and i know what you mean...

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot!, i'm really glad you like it!

[being me]

:)

[Richard Man]

No need to ask... yes I have felt silence scream at me...I can feel your need to express this.
I like the paradox of "simply complicated silence sound" ... I think, however would be stronger if you reversed it " to the sound of simply complicated silence".
Your "I" are still lower case... tut.. tut..naughty girl! LOL That's the teacher in me!

[Salar Majak]

LOL thanks my teacher!!!, i'll put the phrase like you said, it does sounds better, and about the ''i''s well ;) maybe one day time will fix this student ;)

[amarlaksh]

Great! just awesome!! and u r not alone we all are here with u ! :)

[Salar Majak]

:) thanks Amar, i 'm glad you like the poem

[amarlaksh]

welcome!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I have definitely felt the silence you speak of. I have known it in my darkest hours and felt the bitterness in me swell until I wanted the sun to explode and cleanse the cosmos of this pathetic world we call earth. I have looked at death and life as the same with the only difference as breathing. " But there are those who beg God daily for an extra hour. I wish for them, no solitude, no time apart from what they love and let them have their extra hour." excerpt from Extra Hour by Rod McKuen

[Salar Majak]

i'm sorry you had to go through this, i know what you mean, sometimes life sounds meaningless, until you find a reason to live, i used to be surprised by the people who wanted extra hours, more time to live, if they had something to do, they'd better go do it before asking for more, anyways thanks alot

[AYVID N]

You always think of something that takes me by surprise and you have the power to express your thoughts very well. Keep writing and sharing Aurora.

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot :D

[Zizzy Douglas]

hav u evr felt alone?

[Salar Majak]

:), don't we all have such moments when lonliness is our closest form of a friend? when the silence is all you hear when every one talks, when the darkness embraces you and forbids to let you go?, if that's what you mean, then yes, i do feel alone sometimes.

[Zizzy Douglas]

yea......irrespctive f ethnics,tradition,age nd otherwise,we do share a fate in lonliness......
read moreyea......irrespctive f ethnics,tradition,age nd otherwise,we do share a fate in lonliness......
Picturing myself in........i kind f got inspired..... Tnk u!

[Salar Majak]

:) i'm glad i could help

[Zizzy Douglas]

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[de_maruf]

familiar feelings

[Salar Majak]

thanks

[WingsToFly]

yes very familiar feelings, don't need to ask. Beautiful write because it's full of honesty. This lonliness can lead you to the reality of your self and the world.

[Salar Majak]

i know what you mean, thanks alot, i'm glad you like it

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

i feel alone to even tho i'm surrounded by people i love
i loved it
keep it up

[Salar Majak]

thank you!, i'm glad you like it

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

no problem