taking Death's side

this came out of no where

A maze i'm trapped inside
my soul does thrive
a way out to find
away, from the hidden tears,
away, from the hidden cries.

"Sleep'' a whisper is heard
through out the blowing wind
i'm layed on the thorn like stones

''Sleep my child''
is repeated a million times
''all is gone now, no where left to hide,
for ever sleep, forever die''

Amidst the flames i lie
surrounded with stormy fire
between the red raging waves
consumed with anger of desire,
summoned by the darkest worlds,
to the battle feild of dreams,
 to fight for death over life.

Author's Note

i don't know what this is, just call it a crazy thought, correcti0ons are welcomed, and yes i did type the ''i''s small on purpes.

Reviews

[Siren]

"forever sleep, forever die"
It is not often that we think of death to be eternal. I feel like most of the time it's painted as a door--you walk through it, perhaps to another life and perhaps to a sort of non-life yet non-death. These two lines, by far my favorite, lay bare the reality we so often like to forget: that death is forever.

[Salar Majak]

death is immortal, i don't know that,who does? thanks alot for your words

[Siren]

welcome (:

[de_maruf]

nice

[gombeggar]

to the battle 'field' of dreams,

fantastic...good expression here

[Elaenor Aisling]

This is a beautifully poignant piece. Your imagery is great and it has a nice flow, especially the last stanza. Nice work!

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot, i'm glad you like it

[MOON]

Lovely deep thought provoking write . Battle field of dreams poignant.

[Jordan's Back]

This is a wonderful write, Its deep and thought provoking, I have had these same thoughts countless times.

[Salar Majak]

Glad some one like me did :) thanks

[WingsToFly]

Many times most amazing piece come our of crazy thoughts. You always draws us inside your world, your emotions. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.

[Salar Majak]

thanks so much for your great words!

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

wow great work keep it all up

[Salar Majak]

thanks :D

[DrD]

Not a crazy thought at all. This is your reality right now and I appreciate what it leads you to write.

It's "laid" not "layed."

Very nice job.

[Salar Majak]

thanks Dr.D i'mglad you like it

[Felicity's Eve]

Wonderfully disturbing and beautifully haunting...

Very, very nice! :)

[Salar Majak]

thanks you very very much!

[Felicity's Eve]

:)