Going back...... a day dream of confusion

where are you?
I beg for a glimpse
i beg for an answer
i beg for a sign

where am i?
i wonder scared
consumed with fear
i ask with a cry

it sounds the same
but it is not
it looks the same
but feels not

can i go back?
i will be back.
should i go back?
should i not?

from there a rock
i picked it up
and held it closely
swore to lose it not

for it's the only
thing i could save
from my whole country
that is dragged to a grave.

with tears blinded
i leave with rage
with shouting eyes
and a blood stained face.

i will be back
i should be back
i can go back
and dig out that grave.

Reviews

[de_maruf]

nice

[AK]

Great poem! You have a very developed style in writing poetry :) This poem describes your confusion and anxiety very well. I commend you on this endeavour! Keep writing!
P.S-I would have said much more had my right wrist not been sprained :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

so simple yet powerful and gripping ....i love the form...
wher am i?
here i am...brayan adams says

[Salar Majak]

ilove Brayan Adams, i love him!, thanks alot!!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

this just where ill always be:)

[Salar Majak]

:)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

good to be back at writerscafe.org hope i dont forget my password again...

[Salar Majak]

LOL well i hope you don't forget it too!!!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

now what was it? um

[Salar Majak]

LOL no no no don't forget it!!!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

since i fell down from my cycle and banged my head on the road i forget often...

[Salar Majak]

aww sorry to hear that!!, write it somewhere

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

ill tell it to u if u will tell it to me if i forget it after i forget who u r

[Salar Majak]

ok no problem, you won't forget.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

lol i will write it in the ether

[Salar Majak]

ok :)

[Lozzie]

Wow... descriptions=amazing, story=top notch, my expression= =O WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Well done XD

[Salar Majak]

thanks so much Lozzie, i really appreciate it :)

[Lozzie]

you are welcome :)

[MOON]

Heartfelt poignant write, fleeing , be safe !

[Salar Majak]

thanks a lot

[Wolfwind]

The future shall belong to you and those of your generation. The insanity of the now, shall in time be just a memory of the past. Keep strong Aurora, for your song is a beacon of light that other will some day follow.

Hope, Light and Faith
Aaron =)

[Salar Majak]

thank you Aaron for the amazing words of encouragement I really appreciate it.

[quinfinn]

this is raw, gritty, real and from the heart. so much can be said for incorporating true life and real emotion into one's poetry...this is superb!

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot,i'm glad you like it

[DrD]

A wondrous work, Aurora. Written from the war zone of Syria, your voice is the one singing the anthem of hope for your people and I honor that with all my heart.

[Salar Majak]

thanks Dr.D i'm really glad you like it

[Lina Grey]

I know this feeling... I love the intensity and the raw emotion here, and you really got it to feel like a daydream, a fleeting moment, memory already beginning to slip a little. Great job.

[Salar Majak]

really? thanks, i
'm glad you like it

[Lina Grey]

you're welcome :) ...what really?

[Salar Majak]

the day dream part

[Lina Grey]

oh yeah, really

[Felicity's Eve]

I can really feel so much relation to this poem and the emotion and intensity is really well displayed through this. Amazing! :D

[Salar Majak]

thanks :D

[Felicity's Eve]

:)