To feel, no more.......

Empty….

I feel emptiness embrace my soul

nothing less, yet nothing more…

I CAN’T feel anything!

Not pain, not joy, nor fear I hold.

Like I'm only a plant,

that eats, drinks, sleeps, and grows

 

Did I run out of feelings?

Am I only a living machine?

Is it rapped with ice now?
my empty heart I mean.

 

None of that I know,

and it makes me sick to the bone

to lay at night wide awake

thinking about what's gone,

recalling what I've done.

So I faintly close my eyes

and to my head, a gun I hold…

 

 

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

i agree with LA Lorena: although this is written amazingly well, descriptive imagery portraying despair, there's always a solution to every problem and life's always changing. similar to when you're reading a book for the first time and it's time to turn the page. you never know what is going to lay ahead of you. live in hope, hold your head high and keep raising your pen, and write. again, this is a great poem and i commend you for your bravery for sharing something so personal with us all, we have all been there at one time or another, but there's always some faint light through the darkness, please remember that :)

[Salar Majak]

aww thank you sooo very much for this :)

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome :)

[Phillitup]

This is sad and awakens the soul. It depicts the darkness and the lack of support. One slight correction though. Third stanza, third line I believe it is wrapped. That is all I saw besides terminating darkness, regret, shame, and depression...nicely penned. Best regards,
Dell

[Salar Majak]

thanks Dell, and thanks for correcting the typo, i'm glad youl ike the write

[Richard Man]

Maybe it should be wrap and not rap but the music/lyric/song/rhythm and rhyme of the poem could well be rapped with ice.

[quinfinn]

lovely write, i gotta tell you....guns are very messy! this will pass and times will get better, take it from one who knows.

[Salar Majak]

thanks, glad you like the write

[Lina Grey]

I know this feeling, or lack thereof :P but don't pull that trigger hun. I usually just close my eyes and wait till I fall asleep. By the time I wake up, something in my head clicks and i feel again. You can always write about it, like here, but don't actually do it.

[Salar Majak]

i don't think i can do it, maybe holding that gun was just to reminde myself of what's real, important and exists, thanks for the read Elsie

[Lina Grey]

well that's good. and btw, I'm Lina. Elsie didn't want to make her own account so we're sharing. It's Elsie if you see ~em on the end :P

[Felicity's Eve]

So much emotion. I can really feel the pain and numbness you portray so excellently through this.

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot Nora i'm glad you like it

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Cara]

i I agree with Michael
Not everything in life is bad, you can just enjoy being you I
Mean what good will you get when you kill yourself
Just be happy satisfied about yourself , and just keep it your way
Think of it, worth to tray

[Salar Majak]

you think? what i wrote wasn't really meant thoughXD anyways thanks sis

[Cara]

always

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

well don't hold a gun to your head just think of all your friends. they'll miss you if you shot your self. just think of the good times in your life. have fun whale young.

[Salar Majak]

thanks

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

your welcome