Toll of the angels

Lying all pile over pile,

Lying there, left behind.

No one got closer, not one tried,

Till a little girl ran and cried,

Screaming with all her might:

"No……….Daddy………Why"

 

"What wrong have I done my God!

I swear I didn't mean,

I'll give back that pretty doll I stole

I'll never ever be mean!

But please give me my daddy back

Please don't take him away!

He's all I want,

He's all I have!

Nothing will feel the same."

 

Tears in other men's eyes

Were burning up their souls,

One of them hugged the girl and cried:

''I swear there'll be no more''

 

She broke out, held her daddy's hand

And pulled him from the pile,

Then stood to watch the others fall

With panic in her eyes

 

Between the dead, there hid a bomb

Quietly waiting it lied

And all the people ran away,

But the little girl just smiled

Closing her eyes, she sat by him

By her dead father's side

She heard no more

She felt no pain

And away now they both fly.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

In memory of the massacre that happened here yesterday.

Reviews

[Siren]

mm....this is a good one. while i don't know the whole context, i think it does justice because it leaves the reader with sadness but also peace. the mix is an interesting one, almost a paradox, but that is also the sign of good writing. great work! im glad you shared this with me.

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot!!!!! i really appreciate this

[Siren]

always welcome, friend (:

[Fabio_Cassilias]

Very emotional.its very hard to comprehend whats happening over there.besides that it's a very good poem.

[Salar Majak]

thank you Fabio, i'm glad you like it

[marie]

the way you put all of this i can't seem to quite get it all out of my head. it leaves the reader with a bittersweet tone, thank you for sharing this:) great write

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot. i'm glad you enjoyed it

[marie]

no problem:) always a pleasure:)

[dunnia]

wow this is an amazing piece

[Salar Majak]

thank you :)

[Cara]

nice write

[Salar Majak]

thasbnks

[Wolfwind]

This piece captures the essence of both pain, but love as well. You present a scene that even though it comes from a senseless and harsh reality, it becomes a work of art in the poetic colors you capture it with.

I can't imagine the world that you must live in to see such things, but I wish you well and may your ink continue to shine upon the page. =)

Aaron

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot for your kind words, i'm really flattered :)

[Phillitup]

Maybe: Death by the Hour, or Toll of Angels. Something like that...

[Salar Majak]

hmmm i like toll of angels

[DrD]

To convert brutality into poetry is not writing, it is an art and you are the artist to do it. You do it well and bring to us the ugly images of a wrongful war. It is of little difference if the power we know is called God or Allah, may he be with you Aurora in these troubled times. Thank you for your courage and your skill that brings to us a poet's heart.

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot for your kind words that humble me Dr.D i'm really glad you like all of this

[WingsToFly]

beautiful, deeply felt.

[Salar Majak]

thank you, i'm glad you like it

[Phillitup]

"What wrong have I done my God!
I swear I didn't mean,
I'll give back that pretty doll I stole
I'll never ever be mean!
But please give me my daddy back
Please don't take him away!
He's all I want,
He's all I have!
Nothing will feel the same."
This was sad, and clearly about death however the first line of the pasted paragraph...shouldn't it have a question mark. If you want the exclamation mark, that's fine. Just put it after the question mark. This is touching and really sad but I like it all the same. Death is a tragedy...nicely penned and thanks for sharing this tribute...
Best regards,
Phillitup

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot, i'll make sure to put that question mark :)