Aurora

it's a bit gothic

Every breathe of life counts

every struggle to survive in those days

darkness surrounded the world with clouds

enormous, vicious clouds of shade

"succumb to misery my little children

my poor, wreched, suffering slaves''

hissed the darkness throughout space

and death came swiftly hovering

over this eternal night of hate

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A single candle burns with light

trying hard not to fade

facing it sat i, gazing at the only flame

watching it grow bigger in mind

rising higher to the sky in a race

like a sun all over the horizon shines

erasing the dark, allowing dawn to break

for this very thought my heart aches

knowing it is only an image in my brain

knowing that this terror is never to end

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so i lie with eyes wide open

waiting for them to close my grave

listening to the sweet melancholy

that in my heart consistantly plays

willingly givin in to the everlasting sleep

that with kisses shall fill my cheeks

 and forever shall my soul embrace

Author's Note

its my first poem, so cut me a slack k?

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

It's not a "bit" Gothic. It IS Gothic!! It's gorgeous, romantic, and very sensual to both the senses of touch and sound. "kisses shall fill my cheeks".... LOVE that!! I don't know if this makes sense to you, but I felt like you were playing the role of Superman where he took his girlfriend on a date through the clouds for a spin, and they had the greatest of time together. I flew through rainbows with you, rode in on the lightning that showed up at one point, and yet my beautiful company tells of tales where she is to remain on the ground only taking NOTICE of these things. This was powerful and I know I am bias to part of your work where I spring to life when I hear such dramatic wonderment, wanting to be in those arms selfishly, and wishing the pain away by poem's end that has this tragic downward spiral I wasn't ready for. I am STILL not ready for it. I wanted to pull you out of the ground sooo badly, Aurora!! Maybe, it's my emotions today in letters with with you, but for a first poem... this was an amazing reality check on just how gorgeous you allow for me to dream such sweet tones of peace. Even if the end of the poem brings me to you, graveside... I don't like this. I don't like you in any grave. I don't know what to do to pull you out of there, but imagine the hardest that this is all just make-believe!! Having a space above and below your poem would make this one and others by you, stand out and showcase another one of your beautiful poems. I Love You in this poem, Aurora... through the dark AND the light!!

xoxoxoxo -Your Mark

[Salar Majak]

thanks Mark :)
i love your reveiws and i wait for them, through dark and light ha? i love you too dear friend
xoxoxoxoxo Aurora

[Patrick Henry]

It was fun reading your older ones first and will return in the latter hours of the day to read you with easier light and with something sweet to suck on. I like sucking on sweet things like candy and of the like whilst I read your beautiful poems and letters. : ) xoxo -Your Mark

[Salar Majak]

lol, thanks Mark :) looking forward for more things from you

xoxox
Aurora

[Patrick Henry]

Always.... since our day one!! xoxo -Mark

[Rob Santana]

This is really good for your first poem,really!!Erasing the dark allowing dawn to break. Clever wording right there.You should write more poems,go for it.

[Salar Majak]

thank you :) this makes me feel good

[WingsToFly]

Nice :)

[Salar Majak]

thanks