Beauty with brain

Sanjana 's mother ,Mrs Svarna kothari was quite worried about her daughter. Sanjana being an only girl in the three generations of the one of the most prestigious and rich family in Rajasthan is pampered by each and every person of the family . It is reasonable to think that she might be a spoiled and ill mannered girl but in spite she is the opposite.
It happened because of a accident 10 years ago . When coming back one evening from her school sanjana meet an car accident which was purposely arranged by the rivals of the kothari's who are the khuranas. Back then they were the only ones to take the risk of trying to kill the soul of the kothari family.but unfortunately they failed in their attempt and Sanjana was rescued on time. Kothari's to ensure no such thing to happen again destroyed the power of khuranas . This accident resulted in two things that is one making the family realise the threat of almost losing their daughter and another one was that it gave Sanjana a ability to read people's mind and instincts.
Due to gaining an extra special ability sanjana started being more rebellious. Until one day when her brother whom she thought as a role model took the responsibility to teach her how she should use her powers in a positive way . She loved her brother and mother the most and told about this ability to only them . Initially her mother worried about her but eventually she was proud of her daughter who was able to control herself and turned out to be a very beautiful and smart lady of the family.
Sanjana was great at her studies from the beginning, she was termed as an IT genius in her school latter in her college also. She also had carried the genes of her family and was great at managing the business of her family .
She can be coined as beauty with brain.

Author's Note

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[JayG]

You did ask for comment, so…

Fact #1 Sanjana 's mother ,Mrs Svarna kothari was quite worried about her daughter.
Fact #2 Sanjana being an only girl in the three generations of the one of the most prestigious and rich family in Rajasthan is pampered by each and every person of the family.
Fact #3 It is reasonable to think that she might be a spoiled and ill mannered girl but in spite she is the opposite.
Fact # 4 It happened because of a accident 10 years ago.
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This format, that of a narrator whose voice we can’t hear listing and explaining, continues. So the question arises: Is this a story or a report? The format is that of a report: fact-based and author-centric. But is a story about what happens? Is a reader seeking facts, or, are they seeking a form of entertainment? Do they want to know, or be made to feel?

Think about films and books you especially enjoyed. Did they make you nod and say, “I understand,” or did they move you to worry for the protagonist, and shout advice to them as you read or viewed?

If a story is no more than a record of events, any protagonist fits any story. But isn’t it how you feel about the protagonist as-the-story-progresses that makes you enjoy it?

Very few people read history books for fun. But why not? There’s murder, excitement, adventure, love, betrayal…all the elements of fiction. Why don’t history books make us cheer? Because they’re dead. There’s no uncertainty, only events we’ve not yet read.

Fiction, on the other hand, lives. If your reader knows the situation as the protagonist does—misunderstandings, biases and all; if your reader knows what the protagonist sees as important enough to react to; if your reader knows what options the protagonist feels they have, and what why; If your reader knows what the protagonist feels they need to have happen—their immediate objective, then your reader has BECOME the protagonist, and will feel as if THEY must decide what to do next. And because of the nature of writing, they will make that decision BEFORE they read what the protagonist decides. So they’re not just reading about what happens, they’re LIVING the story in real time, ands calibrating their responses to those of the protagonist.

Place the reader into that mind-sate and they will NEED to find out what the protagonist decides, to see if it matches their decision. Then, agree or not, they will need to find out if it works. In other words, you’ve given the reader a need to turn the pages. Fail that and they don’t. It’s that simple.

All professions are acquired IN ADDITION to the general skills our schooldays give us, and writing fiction is a profession. So if you are to write it you need to take the time to pick up a few of the tools the pros take for granted. So time spent reading, studying, and practicing professional Fiction-Writing techniques is time wisely invested.

I know this isn’t what you hoped to hear. But I commented because it is something every writer needs to know, and…well, you did ask.

But some good news: The learning will be like going backstage in the theater for the first time—interesting and fun. And if it turns out not to be? Well, you’ve learned something important. So it’s win/win, right?

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/

[Beauty lily]

Thank you sir for your genuine comment I will try my best to implement this and make sure to grab the attention of my viewers.
Thanks for such a beautiful advice...😄😄

[JayG]

A small suggestion, then: There are two books I recommend. In your case, it's Debra Dixon's, GMC: Goal Motivation & Conflict, which you can download from a bookseller like Amazon. It's a warm, easy read, and while it won't make a professional writer of you—that's your task—it will give you the tools and the knowledge with which to do it it it's in you.

Hope this helps.