Trying to Find A Dream Within This Nightmare

Wake me up,

Before it all falls apart.

Trying to find a way
To mend this broken heart.

 

The sun and the moon

Have started a war within my head.

Attempting to be the peacemaker of it all

But my soul's been torn to shreds.

 

Echoes in the mist of the night

I can hear all my demons scream

Shadows moving across the walls

When all I want is to live in a dream.

 

This nightmare is never-ending,

Bugs crawling upon my skin.

The monsters of my dark reality,

I refuse to let them win.

 

I'm burning in the fire

Pushing myself through all the pain.

Dark clouds always following close

Pouring down their acid rain.

 

I'm learning to embrace the silence,

It's the only way I can heal.

Wrapped in a shell of my own cliches

Nothing can change the way I feel.

 

Writing my heart out to the world,

Just trying to clear some air

Desperately searching for something more

A dream within this nightmare.

 

 

Author's Note

Written at the dentist. As much as I hate writing rhyming poems, I think I'm pleased with this one.

Reviews

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

Very well-written. I liked the rhyming ^-^ It's very cool that you can come up with such art just sitting waiting at the dentist!

[Dahlia Phoenix]

This poem's flow sure has a way to hit someone when they read this. The imagery is sinister in my opinion but don't we all try sometimes to seek the better in our dreams? After all, we see things others can't and create our own imagination during those ours. A heart felt poem for sure.

[Chris Taylor]

I love this piece as well. The rhyming scheme is solid and the theme is well mapped out. The line:"Pouring down like acid rain" means a something to me since I spent a bunch of my formative years in California. So, I know acid rain very well. I also loved the imagery you evoked too. Good poem.

[Rene Velez]

Rhyme scheme is nice...though I would tweek the last stanza because nightmare doesn't fit in the end and extends the punchline...there are ways, play with it a little It's ok to change things around a bit...the imagery is superb, really nice poem....just one more thing in the last stanza if you take out the "AS I" it actually allows nightmare to fit fluidly...just a thought.. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like the questions raised by the poem and the strong statements. Hard to know where we stand and what to feel sometime.
"I'm burning in the fire
Pushing myself through all the pain.
Dark clouds always following close
Pouring down their acid rain."
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

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brillaint write along with a brilliant rhythmic pattern!

[Dove]

The words all flow together and you used excellant rhymes.

[LinBin]

This a a great poem....you rhyme really well..I can tell x

[Sakib]

Looking at the title I thought it would be an interesting read. And it didn't disappoint me. Powerful and touching. Nice poem. :)

[paradise]

Wow this is beautiful I under stood every word. It is an amazing poem and I plove it