Disturbia

 

 Lights flashing,

My monsters are lurking

As I'm wondering what's wrong with me.

I think I'm going insane.

  

 It’s like a stalker in the night

Creeping up to grab you.

The echoes play inside my mind

As the shadows play on the walls.

 

 Are they figments of my imagination?

They are getting too close for comfort.

A disease of the mind,

And it's finally got a hold of me.

 

These demons have been unleashed

from their cages in my soul.

Black clouds pouring acid rain

poisoning all that is left of me.

 

My heart is quickly racing now,

Destroying my state of euphoria.

The colors are flashing - purple, green, and white

As I spiral down out of control.

 

Release me from this curse I'm in,

The emotions are grinding in my skull.

Trying to tame these wicked thoughts

As my mind goes into disturbia.

 

 

 

Reviews

[alternative_be]

Being empathic, reading this poem touched me really deep! My skin began to crawl (which is a good thing in this case, taking into account what you are describing)... No, no figments of your imagination for this is your reality, whatever anyone may tell you.
All that you are describing is coming from within.
Your writing is as strong as it is courageous!
Thank you for having the strength to share this with us!

[mysticgypsy]

i loved it , i wish i could write poem as good as that. great job

[EFidelity]

Very descriptive and great imagery. I like the title.

[Jessica Fox]

Awesome poem and it reminds me of the Rihanna song, great job with this and if I already reviewed it umm oops hahaha

[Celtic Cat]

Effing righteous write! You are write to name yourself "Beautifully Tragic"... you do express the tragedy in life so well. Each of your pieces are piercing and moving.... your writing is fantastic... I've missed it. Had to come by for a taste. Wonderful write.... a perfect explanation for exactly how it happens... every time. : (

Much love~~

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

This poem is terrific. The flow is just wonderful and the imagery is great. Awesome write!!!

Heather

[Jane Doe]

WOW! Amazing! Brilliant! Sublime! Superlative! I have no more words to express just how much I enjoyed this poem. Though I loved all of it, these were my fav lines:

'A disease of the mind,

And it's finally got a hold of me.'

[Sean M. Addams]

this is an awesome piece very well written flowing with great imagery.... fav lines..Lights flashing,

My monsters are lurking

As I'm wondering what's wrong with me.

I think I'm going insane.



It's like a stalker in the night

Creeping up to grab you.

The echoes play inside my mind

As the shadows play on the walls. .............................. nice job on this one!!!!

[poddar kushal]

The evil within us crawls out. a wonder of a poem

[These Haunted Hallways]

WOW WOW!!!!! Yep, uve hit it right on the head of what it truly feels like, and i have to defnitley hand it to ya hehe. God, ur so good at this lol. Uve explained it so well!! Very awesome job!!

B.A.