A Deadly Love

I was inspired by Otep's recent music video "Crooked Spoons" about the world's love for violence. Hopefully, thats what I accomplished in this piece without seeing the video.

The symptoms are visible,

Being overwhelmed

As the world bleeds of heartache

Drowning in the never-ending violence.

 

We are trapped in submission,

Those that have a strong belief

But little hope within ourselves,

That love will heal all the pain.

 

It ugliness,

Sanitized in the bloody pool of excuses

Never wanting to face the facts of truth

There is a problem within society’s walls.

 

We give our hearts to one another

Vulnerable, wearing them on our sleeves

Never knowing what’s right around the corner

A dark world, with no way out.

 

Trapped with some little hope

To survive in the torturous turmoil

To blind to see that love is not real,

And it’s surely fading.

 

Mothers cry in the lonely nights

As a war goes on in a distant land.

Dead or alive,

Is freedom really worth the risk?

 

Succumbing to a mouthful

Of poisonous lies, a government feeds

Either submits to the lies

Or be labeled a traitor.

 

Too many expectations

Too many drowned in the greed

I wonder if love can survive,

Or will it become deadly?

 

Author's Note

I was inspired by Otep's recent music video "Crooked Spoons" about the world's love for violence. Hopefully, thats what I accomplished in this piece without the video. I think I may have screwed this up after the 5th stanza. So any suggestions or corrections welcome. =)

Reviews

[Valentine]

A very good write..I know right now this is the worse I have ever seen our nation..It is not pleasant to think of those younger than I and the generation after thatr..What will be left of freedom or America when they are grown....if war hasn't destroyed them too..Life is sad all over..not just at the gas pump..God bless...valentine

[bluessadmood]

yes too much violence,too much lies ,i really do not know who to believe anymore ,we are all victoms to some same old people who play with us like ponies,our lives is just a trash for them ,most important is that they prevail at any means ,no matter what ,i wonder is there no end ,very pretty write,moayad

[ANNA]

More then just a very good WRITE! I found myself speechless. I was wraped around. Twisted in the words you use to write this heartfelt poem. WOWOWOWOW.. I find myself looking to your poems in helping me find what to say in my writings. Thank you.. You write what some can't feel. Writing is a gift and you have it girl!!

Much lov n respect,
Anna

[Sarah]

Great job with this. Definitely captured the chaos and violence that the world is surrounded by nowadays. It's become almost a part of life to hear about war and death, as though it's not horrible at all, but commonplace and kind of embraced. Very scary. Great job with the dark imagery. =)

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written with a deep message. I haven't seem the music video, so I can't compare.