My Love

something that just came out...

My love,

When will you realize

You are the creator of my world,

Like Gaea to our Mother Earth.

 

When our souls collided

Like an asteroid in deep impact

Emotions bled from my heart,

And became yours to control.

 

You create a new dawn,

Every time you make me smile.

Shedding light into my dark world

Chasing away the demons within.

 

When you hurt me,

My world of once life and beauty

Collapses, as the acid rain starts to pour

Destroying all fragile life that remains.

 

Crimson floods,

Drown my heavy heart,

But only you have the power

Of a God to stop the rain.

 

My love,

My heart is only for you,

As it bleeds every word

Here on this blank page.

 

Stricken with love and hate

Somehow knowing you're my One

My only of sweet love.

The sweet love of lacking much passion.

 

Our love is complicated...

And almost equal to a really hard math problem.

Never in our years of schooling

Have I found math to be an easy subject.

 

I yearn for life,

While yearning for death.

While you stay hidden

In the shadows of your own thoughts.

 

But yet we are, no doubt

In love with each other's company.

Taking advantage of the privilege

Of togetherness.

 

Like a God to a Goddess,

His sweet beloved wife,

You are within control over me.

Hypnotizing me with every movement.

 

With both troubled pasts,

We somehow make it through.

I sometimes wonder,

Will this be destiny or history?

Reviews

[Ralphy]

I love the comparison of emotions to complexities. It drove me and controlled me until the final question. "Will this be destiny or history?"
My favorite verse

My love,
My heart is only for you,
As it bleeds every word
Here on this blank page.

This brought the work to life. Each drop of blood brushed onto the blank page, driven by the emotional heart painted this complex love.

[Michael X]

rayne, what i really enjoy about this dreamy, desirous poem, is how your vision follows through,
the way each passionate sentence builds upon the next, sculpting additional detail in motion with
every heart stirring word, empathically romanticized, the stardust imagery glitters in light of your
ability to surrender your soul, as ink pours from the heart, the artfully charged analogies are
captivatingly original, the sense of yearning, walking in the shadows of Gods and Goddesses is
insightfully sentimental, to believe in destiny, scripted with pure imagery and emotional devotion,
beautifully imagined, the crafty, well devised form accentuates the cascading, invigorating flow.

[James Takeo Panton]

This is beautifully written with soe great spiritual imagery...it works well with the subject.....

[WritefromtheHeart]

What an intense poem...filled with so much love and deep emotion. It is both amazing and sometimes a little overpowering how love affects us, isn't it? Well written...I just had one stanza that trips me as I read..and I read it over three times to see:

Our love is complicated...

And almost equal to a really hard math problem.

Never in our years of schooling

Have I found math to be an easy subject.


I hope you don't mind my saying this, as I love your writing, I just thought I would tell you how I felt as I read. I would definitely want the same from you ;-)

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really a great write!
So deep and intense, raw indeed!
But still it's full of warmness and most importantly, with the great emotion of LOVE...which is pouring such a deep essence of togetherness in it!
"Like a God to a Goddess,
His sweet beloved wife,
You are within control over me.
Hypnotizing me with every movement."
Awwww! This is pure magic!
Beautiful write! :)

[Y.F.]

This poem really captures the essence of love - could be destructive or the greatest goodness ever portrayed.

"I yearn for life,
While yearning for death.
While you stay hidden
In the shadows of your own thoughts."

This one not only captures the exact feeling of love, but also describes one of the greatest issues, occurring when the other side isn't opening his heart and soul to us, sharing his emotions.

Wonderful.

[Phil Sanders]

This is very powerful and emotive .... superbly written ...