My Love

something that just came out...

My love,

When will you realize

You are the creator of my world,

Like Gaea to our Mother Earth.

 

When our souls collided

Like an asteroid in deep impact

Emotions bled from my heart,

And became yours to control.

 

You create a new dawn,

Every time you make me smile.

Shedding light into my dark world

Chasing away the demons within.

 

When you hurt me,

My world of once life and beauty

Collapses, as the acid rain starts to pour

Destroying all fragile life that remains.

 

Crimson floods,

Drown my heavy heart,

But only you have the power

Of a God to stop the rain.

 

My love,

My heart is only for you,

As it bleeds every word

Here on this blank page.

 

Stricken with love and hate

Somehow knowing you're my One

My only of sweet love.

The sweet love of lacking much passion.

 

Our love is complicated...

And almost equal to a really hard math problem.

Never in our years of schooling

Have I found math to be an easy subject.

 

I yearn for life,

While yearning for death.

While you stay hidden

In the shadows of your own thoughts.

 

But yet we are, no doubt

In love with each other's company.

Taking advantage of the privilege

Of togetherness.

 

Like a God to a Goddess,

His sweet beloved wife,

You are within control over me.

Hypnotizing me with every movement.

 

With both troubled pasts,

We somehow make it through.

I sometimes wonder,

Will this be destiny or history?

Reviews

[Ralphy]

I love the comparison of emotions to complexities. It drove me and controlled me until the final question. "Will this be destiny or history?"
My favorite verse

My love,
My heart is only for you,
As it bleeds every word
Here on this blank page.

This brought the work to life. Each drop of blood brushed onto the blank page, driven by the emotional heart painted this complex love.

[irazely]

amazing use of imagery and camparisons.

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I love this poem! Seriously. No joke.

Uhh... I really liked your comparisons... first with god, then with the earth, and the with math,,, now that's really creative! Your imagery just amazes me! It does. I could see so many things from what you said, and even the more vague and hard-to-see lines were really powerful. The poem actually flowed very, very well...

So it just came out? Like that? Sure, I believe that...

I really like your last stanzas (i finally know what they're called).

The 4th to last and of course... the last stanzas are my favorite.

I really don't have much to say as advice though. Sorry. Maybe you could avoid that repetition on the math part. Find another word for it...

[Rylan Batten]

I am completely taken by your use of imagery. Really good piece, thanks for posting, I can tell some real heart went into this

[Valentine]

A real or dream lover..it still can bring pain or happiness..but to be controlled by someone I had with my ex..I am still disabled from his kind of attention..the try to kill me kind..God bless..Valentine

[The Outlaws' Song]

Wonderful! You are simply amazing!

[An owl on the moon]

So haunting and passionate in every line. You display the complex nature of love and desire, drawn to the ONE who like the air and water sustains you in all ways. Simply beautiful in every way!

[Lee W. Deason]

With both troubled pasts,

We somehow make it through.

I sometimes wonder,

Will this be destiny or history?


These lines felt like when you look at an opportunity and you know its yours.
And it is taken for better for worse.
Because you know you can't let it slide.

Thank you for sharing.

[Jane Doe]

Wow, simply amazing. I love that opening stanza, it is perfect. You do a very good job of conveying the complicated nature of love. This is a great write! Thanks for sharing.

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

Wow, this is an astounding piece of writing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The emotions of a relationship are even more complicated when our baggage from past ones keep us waited down and can even effect what happens... very well expressed emotions.