My Love

something that just came out...

My love,

When will you realize

You are the creator of my world,

Like Gaea to our Mother Earth.

 

When our souls collided

Like an asteroid in deep impact

Emotions bled from my heart,

And became yours to control.

 

You create a new dawn,

Every time you make me smile.

Shedding light into my dark world

Chasing away the demons within.

 

When you hurt me,

My world of once life and beauty

Collapses, as the acid rain starts to pour

Destroying all fragile life that remains.

 

Crimson floods,

Drown my heavy heart,

But only you have the power

Of a God to stop the rain.

 

My love,

My heart is only for you,

As it bleeds every word

Here on this blank page.

 

Stricken with love and hate

Somehow knowing you're my One

My only of sweet love.

The sweet love of lacking much passion.

 

Our love is complicated...

And almost equal to a really hard math problem.

Never in our years of schooling

Have I found math to be an easy subject.

 

I yearn for life,

While yearning for death.

While you stay hidden

In the shadows of your own thoughts.

 

But yet we are, no doubt

In love with each other's company.

Taking advantage of the privilege

Of togetherness.

 

Like a God to a Goddess,

His sweet beloved wife,

You are within control over me.

Hypnotizing me with every movement.

 

With both troubled pasts,

We somehow make it through.

I sometimes wonder,

Will this be destiny or history?

Reviews

[Ralphy]

I love the comparison of emotions to complexities. It drove me and controlled me until the final question. "Will this be destiny or history?"
My favorite verse

My love,
My heart is only for you,
As it bleeds every word
Here on this blank page.

This brought the work to life. Each drop of blood brushed onto the blank page, driven by the emotional heart painted this complex love.

[Jessica Fox]

I'm not sure I reviewed this, I have been lacking in that department. Good job with this poem and I loved the visuals

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

The sweet love of lacking much passion.
This line explains it all. Wanting a love so back going after finding all the right reasons yet knowing the love is no good. You brought these words to life in a well flowing verse, clear to understand.

[Broken.]

I have to say this is amazing in every way in my eyes, seeming to explain so much so delicately...

"When you hurt me,
My world of once life and beauty
Collapses, as the acid rain starts to pour
Destroying all fragile life that remains."

&&

"I yearn for life,
While yearning for death.
While you stay hidden
In the shadows of your own thoughts.'

Will forever be my favorite verses.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Your poem i certainly a deep expression of how we use our emotions to make love a more complicated thing then it is and lord knows it's already very complicated... that last question was a powerful statement on a beautiful piece.

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

Very artistic and pure brilliance! Loved the poem! Good luck in all your futre works!

[D Poet K]

wow, this poem is definitely brilliant. I like it a lot more than the other one I just read. both were amazing but this one...just...wow

[Brittany DeFranco]

when I read this poem I think of my dark evil soul and heart fading awat=y because my only love cares and loves so much for me. I really truly think this, I'm serious ok. This is going into my favorites!! I really love emo or love poetry!!

~Brittany ^-^

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I tried to pick my favorite stanza, but I couldn't. I love every word in this. I can relate to this so much it's scary. Love is a funny thing....funny how someone can become the puppeteer and we become the puppet in a relationship.

When our souls collided
Like an asteroid in deep impact
Emotions bled from my heart,
And became yours to control.



Wonderful job.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This was a great piece! You capture the emotionsand the complexities of that emotion amazingly... I loved your last line it really made the poem! Great Job!

[SM Davis]

This is so sad...There is a sense that there is no hope. Finely written. Thank you!