Ghostflowers

A poem that my mind made up, I have no idea what it means.

Living with each incision

Placed diligently in my hands

Pain in a razor blade,

Thousands of visible strands

 

Picking ghostflowers

From my broken, dying soul

Insanity lingers deep within

Losing all within my control

 

I silently listen

To Death's sweet melody

Wishing for him to come for me

And set my spirit free

 

I have bared all my scars

Of my timeless sins

Living in the shadows of your lies

Hiding in your wicked grins.

 

 

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

Wow! An absolutely amazing poem. I loved it! These two stanzas were my favorites:

'Picking ghostflowers

From my broken, dying soul

Insanity lingers deep within

Losing all within my control



I silently listen

To Death's sweet melody

Wishing for him to come for me

And set my spirit free'

I so know that insanity that 'lingers deep within.' This piece is full of raw emotions, and I love it!

[Glee]

Take heart dear, things can't be that bad. Thanx for sharing once again. Love your work.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Rayne your writing is always enjoyable.. the poem above it saddens me but life is like this .. sad at times..
Seems the poem wanted you to write it .. i like the images , strong and the picture gives more to this poem.. as always with your poetry i truly enjoyed it.

Chloe
xoxo

[Shadows of Sight]

This was really mind opening! I could imagine a young girl, given the gift of being able to see the dead, and feel their torments. Yet wishing that death himself would come and take her away from this endless torment of always seeing those that had passed and lingered.

Great Write! :)

[Ralphy]

this is a Fascinating piece I especially like the Conclusion...

I have bared all my scars

Of my timeless sins

Living in the shadows of your lies

Hiding in your wicked grins.

[bluessadmood]

nice write i enjoyed i a lot

[Sparrow]

"Of my timeless sins"

GREAT line.

The rhyme scheme was unique and you did a wonderful job painting images with your unique descriptions like "picking ghostflowers". Beautiful piece :)

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful piece, very good flow and rhyme, a powerful subject to write about but you did a great job!

Brilliant!

[Y.F.]

I just reviewed this one before you took it down (as you probably know).
I really like the flow - it really shows that this piece grew organically out of your mind.
I'm not sure, but I think it's a little different than before (in content).
An excellent write.