You Make Me Laugh

I dont care how this turns out ----I'm venting.

How dare you think you know me,

Please, let's just be real

When it comes to art and writing

I express the way I feel

 

I am true to myself,

In the rhymes that I write my own

No matter who likes or not

In my world of art, I'm not alone

 

You climb the mountain of drama

Just to get what you think you deserve

I think you're thinking too highly, my friend

Look at my work, and get served.

 

The IQ of a child,

Thats what you seem to be

Ranting and raving, some temper tantrum

Its funny to think you're better than me.

 

I know the difference

Between right and wrong

I'm sorry but you're not big enough

Compared to you I'm much more strong

 

Trash my friends,

Who are better than you

Let them fall to your belittling,

A true writer you will see through

 

I am a hell of a lot better than you.

So please, don't make me laugh.

Author's Note

If you are keeping up with my situation around WritersCafe --- yes, its about that.

Reviews

[cleft]

Who are the nazis and who are the morons?
It was ok. I can see you like to toot your own horn.

[M_S_Lay]

I dont know about your situation, but it speaks to all of us in the fact that we've felt this way at one time or another in our lives.

great write.

[JC Fox]

Sheesh seems like the Nazis and the morons have combined forces

[THERISA]

Remind me not to get upon your pissed off side, when you are sitting in front of a computer. :) Hopefully, this venting will help to release the frustration and anger that has been building up for you, Rayne. As for your poem, its a strong and passionate defense of your position. Thank you for sharing your emotional rant with us.

Therisa

[Y.F.]

You surely aren't alone. :)

Yes I've been following this whole story around for a while, but I've stopped, and I think it's for the best if you too put it behind.

Now for the actual review - great job expressing your anger.
Great flow, great rhyming, and great use of emotion overall.

One grammar comment - 4th line from the end - "more better". :
I suggest omitting 'more' (which I think is what you meant).